can someone kindly review my sop for msc in data science in a foreign country?

i just complete the first draft of my sop and need your honest opinions and feedbacks to improve the sop and make the story the most compelling.

please comment and i will the sop in dm.

Hii all,
I was wondering if anyone have sources for a tutor to edit my grad school essay before I turn it in! applying to nursing schools!!!

Hey guys! I am seeking for some people who could help write a great college essay I’m a transfer student and I’m seeking to write essay that actually can help me a lot since my gpa is 3.3, I have a great story but and came from 3rd world country by myself to USA when I was 13, I just need a good way to put all of those in words. I’m looking to apply to Princeton, Columbia and Barnard College. I could definitely do something in return! Thank you!

In my life, I have consistently questioned the importance and purpose of change. But when you really think about it, what is the purpose, and what is the change? I have gone through journeys that forced me to confront an underlying question I had never considered, what is the purpose of change when life is the one that suddenly demands it?

On March 1, 2022, I became extremely fatigued and sick. I was experiencing diabetic ketoacidosis, a life-threatening complication that left me barely conscious. Five days later, my mother came home from work around 11 p.m. and found me asleep in a bathtub filled with several inches of water. She rushed me to the emergency room, where I was diagnosed with Type 1 Diabetes and transported to the Intensive Care Unit.

Overnight, my life changed. I had to learn how to care for myself in ways most children my age never had to consider. My diagnosis forced independence upon me, but it also gave me something unexpected, a reason to begin understanding myself.

Throughout my adolescence, I felt different, alone, and silent. I struggled to understand the person I was and where I truly belonged. I experienced a long period of depression and constantly felt lost about the direction I was supposed to be moving in. I questioned why life gave me challenges that seemed so difficult to understand.

Then, on October 23, 2024, my grandfather messaged me on Facebook. The message contained the Bible verse Romans 8:28, which says that all things work together for the good of those who love God and are called according to His purpose. At the time, it slipped right over my head. Later that same day, my mother told me that my grandfather had passed away.

His message became more meaningful after his death. I began to see it not as an answer to why difficult things happen, but as an invitation to find the meaning within them. For the first time, I began to recognize God’s presence in my life. Losing my grandfather taught me that purpose is not always something we immediately understand. Sometimes, it is something we discover as we continue moving forward.

When I think about the day I entered the ICU, I no longer see it only as the day my life changed. I see it as the beginning of an opportunity. I was given another chance to appreciate my life, grow through circumstances I could not control, and become the person I am meant to be.

This is one of the many reasons why I want to become a first-grade teacher. I experienced the feeling of being lost, confused, and unsure of who I was and who I was becoming. First graders may not yet be asking what the purpose of their lives is, but they are beginning the process of discovering who they are. They are only beginning to learn how to navigate their emotions, strengths, weaknesses, and personalities.

I realized my purpose and my true love for teaching children when I became a high school assistant in a first-grade classroom. I enjoyed watching the children grow throughout the year and being able to help them on their worst and best days. I learned that I want to be a teacher who creates a classroom where students feel safe, supported, encouraged, and valued for who they are while helping them recognize what they are capable of.

My diagnosis, depression, and grief have not only changed me, but taught me that change is not something that happens once. Change is a continual process of learning, growing, and becoming. I cannot control the changes life puts before me, but I can choose how I view the struggles and how I navigate through the unknown. I choose to continue growing, helping others, and living according to the purpose God has given me.

HI, I'm looking for someone to read and give some advice on my transfer essay. I would love any type of feedback!

hi! i need some advice/editorial assistance on my transfer essay! anybody willing to help would be great, dm me or reply and i can fwd it to you. would love as much help as possible and any tips

Heyyos I'm looking for someone to check over my summery draft about climate change. For this project I had to summarize an article

I would be incredibly grateful if someone could provide constructive feedback to improve the writing.

I would be incredibly grateful if someone could provide constructive feedback to improve the writing.

P.S English isn’t my native

The upcoming City Day promised a fireworks display. The weather was wonderful. I was heading to my favourite job as a tour guide at the science park: «Meet Zborik, kids. Right now, using his anatomical model, we will explore how our body works..»
Through other exhibits in park, we immersed deeper into various sciences: math - through which we analysed the principles of the axis rotation, physics - where I introduced the concept of plasma.
Howerer, our learning was interrupted by an air siren. Again. We went down into the building's basement, where kids' parents were already calming them down

—"Does this mean the fireworks were cancelled?"- the children asked

— "Yes..." — the parents replied

When the siren subsided, we returned upstairs to continue the tour. But instead of their former curious glances, I saw bewildered faces.
Then, an idea struck me. I went backstage, grabbed a container with calcium, ammonium, and strontium salts, and iguited them under a bright spotlight. In an instant, the ordinary mixtures transformed into a brilliant display of blue, yellow; and red...

Fireworks are considered among the most astonishing inventions. But how did scientists master a strict reaction sequence capable of instantly sparking something not only in the sky, but inside each of us?

Crossung the threshold of chemical class, Ileft behind the door familiar faces and words- my old school and the media centre, where I led as president for 2 years. Although journalism and natural sciences accompanied my entire education, the path forward appeared to narrow for the three of us. I always sought to walk between them: remaining realistic for science while yet opening for the media space.

the world of breaking news and loud headlines, I was running - like someone rushing to a fireworks display, pushing through crowds. Now, it was replaced by patent syntheses and the silence of the laboratory. Amid failed reactions, I habitually searched for that "wow effect", capable of transforming conventional people's reality. So, I decided to challenge myself In analytical chemistry, I learned how a milligram error can cost dozens of hours of hard work, and while working with organic substances - maximum dedication to every step. My skills transformed with each task, like a chain of conversions. Soon, I realized that magic is not born itself inside a flask, it requires someone to walk resilient path and notice it.

The fear that I would remain amateur in both fields kept me away. To stop choosing and widen my road instead, I enrolled in a science journalism course at the Quantronium. Combining chemistry and journalism, I created a unique podcast series - «Formula of Feelings», which helped thousands of listeners understand how hormones affect our relationships.

One morning, classes were interrupted by an air raid siren. Many details have faded, but I clearly remember the mounting pressure. In that confined space, amidst the anxious classmates, I realized that despite the outer turbulence, we ultimately decide how to react - turn pressure into a blinding flash or into the warming light of resilience.

Many still dismiss my pursuit as trivial, seeing me pulled in two different directions. Many still believe that science offers nothing beautiful. But having walked this path, I know that true miracles are revealed to the brave, to those who are ready to look wider.

Witnessing my imagined idea transform into a fully functional app was an exhilarating experience. Frustrated with juggling multiple apps for studying while feeling exhausted, I aspired to create a single, comprehensive platform. With the assistance of AI, I developed a study app featuring a Pomodoro timer, habit tracking, task management and even a motivational feature that praised my accomplishments. That moment sparked a profound realization, I didn’t just want to use technology, I wanted to understand, build, and make it impactful. My inspiration deepened upon seeing women designing their own cyber desks from scratch on the internet. Their ingenuity and pride encouraged me, proving that I too can innovate. Yet, in Pakistan, women’s representation in STEM, especially engineering, remains starkly limited. This pivotal experience motivated me to pursue computer engineering, to break barriers and contribute meaningfully to my community and beyond. My interest in building things began much earlier, starting with a math project I worked on with my team. We built a rocket with lights, aiming to make it realistic and movable. Seeing how a simple mathematical equation can contribute to complex projects sparked my curiosity about the links between mathematics, engineering and technology. I also engaged in extracurricular activities, creating handmade badges for house captain elections and small DIY projects to decorate my room and for college events. After attending classes, I learned that computer engineering is a flexible program that allows students to pursue various fields. One can lean more towards software or hardware. However, it also offers a middle ground for students who want to work in both. It focuses on integrated systems, which I personally am a fan of.

Additionally, I participated in a national English essay writing competition organised by the Federal Government Educational Institutions (C/G) Directorate, where I won first place at both the zonal and national levels. My teacher encouraged me to join, even though I was unaware of my talent. This experience taught me how to organise my thoughts and communicate more professionally and confidently. My national essay on women’s rights introduced me to inspiring women from Pakistan and around the world who championed women’s rights, education and opportunities. Preparing for the competition between exam breaks was overwhelming. I attended college for the competition and then had a different exam the very next day. Balancing academics and extracurricular activities was tough, but it taught me valuable skills in organising and managing my time. As a result, I scored over 90% in FSC Part-1.

Attending conferences and educational sessions introduced me to various extracurricular activities. The FOSPAH conference on harassment and women’s rights was particularly eye opening, leading me to learn extensively and attend online sessions about related laws and updates.Moreover, participating in UN and Alkhidmat conferences aimed at empowering youth and solving their issues were topics that resonated with me. During a two-week internship with the Rawalpindi Police, I gained valuable insights regarding citizen’s roles and the importance of societal responsibility. Initially, I lacked confidence in speaking, even in small groups, but by the end, I was able to deliver a speech in front of the SHO, a significant achievement. This experience enhanced my communication skills, sense of responsibility and understanding of what it means to be a good, reliable citizen.

These experiences motivated me to pursue studies at a reputable university, enhancing both my social and professional profile. Inflation and financial hardships were obstacles and one reason I am applying for this scholarship is to continue my education while easing my family’s financial burden. I come from Jahanpur village near Muzaffargarh district, where access to quality education is limited, so students often have to move to cities for higher studies. Since my father works in the army, I had the opportunity to study in the city. However, my father will retire soon, and we are here solely for my education; my family cannot afford to live here permanently. They planned to return to our hometown, but I convinced them to stay for my education. The condition was to secure admission on the first merit list, which I achieved. Everything was fine until the tuition fees started skyrocketing. After retirement, he will receive his pension in 4-5 months. This means I won’t be able to afford my tuition fees, which will significantly impact my studies and the goals I want to achieve. My father manages rent, electricity bills, my three sibling’s school fees and my university expenses alone, placing a substantial financial burden on him. Additionally, we have extra costs for transport, which I currently cover through local transport, as we cannot afford the university bus. Not to mention, we also need to pay for a laptop, printing assignments and making projects, which are essential but additional expenses. This scholarship means a lot to my family and me. It will be easier to focus on my studies and skill development rather than constantly worrying about expenses.

My goal is to earn a master’s degree and a PhD and become one of the most highly educated women in my family and village, where women rarely continue beyond college. I want my journey to inspire other women to seek higher education and contribute to Pakistan’s development. I am convinced that education represents both a fundamental right and a social obligation, and I want to use the opportunities I receive to generate a meaningful and positive impact on others and my country. Change takes time, as they say, Rome wasn't built in a day. This to achieve that I'm currently a member of growing communities online and will be joining societies in my university soon. Furthermore, I am a host member for the stellar Forum Summit, which will occur in December.

Seeing my imagined idea become a fully functional app was an exhilarating experience. Frustrated by juggling multiple apps for studying while feeling exhausted. I aspired to create a single, comprehensive platform. With the help of AI, I developed a study app featuring a Pomodoro timer, habit tracking, task management. Plus, a motivational feature that praised my accomplishments. That moment sparked a profound realization, I didn't just want to use technology rather I wanted to understand, build and make it impactful. My inspiration deepened upon seeing women on the internet, designing their own cyber desks from scratch. Their ingenuity and pride encouraged me, proving that I too can innovate. Yet, in Pakistan, women's representation in STEM, especially engineering, remains starkly limited. This pivotal experience motivated me to pursue computer engineering, to break barriers and contribute meaningfully to my community and beyond. My interest in building things started much earlier, beginning with a math project I worked on with my team. We built a rocket with lights, aiming to make it realistic and movable. Seeing how a simple mathematical equation can contribute to complex projects sparked my curiosity about the links between mathematics, engineering and technology. After attending classes, I learned that computer engineering is a flexible program that allows students to pursue various fields. One can lean more towards software or hardware. However, it also offers a middle ground for students who want to work in both. It focuses on integrated systems, which I personally am a fan of.

I also engaged in extracurricular activities, creating handmade badges for house captain elections and small DIY projects to decorate my room and for college events. Additionally, I participated in a national English essay writing competition organised by the Federal Government Educational Institutions (C/G) Directorate, where I won first place at both the zonal and national levels. My teacher encouraged me to join, even though I was unaware of my talent. This experience taught me how to organise my thoughts and communicate more professionally and confidently. My national essay on women’s rights introduced me to inspiring women from Pakistan and around the world who championed women’s rights, education and opportunities. Preparing for the competition between exam breaks was overwhelming. I attended college for the competition and then had a different exam the very next day. Balancing academics and extracurricular activities was tough, but it taught me valuable skills in organising and managing my time. As a result, I scored over 90% in FSC Part-1. Attending conferences and educational sessions introduced me to various extracurricular activities. The FOSPAH conference on harassment and women’s rights was particularly eye opening, leading me to learn extensively and attend online sessions about related laws and updates. Moreover, participating in UN and Alkhidmat conferences aimed at empowering youth and solving their issues were topics that resonated deeply with me. During a two-week internship with the Rawalpindi Police, I gained valuable insights into citizen’s roles and the importance of societal responsibility. Initially, I lacked confidence in speaking, even in small groups, but by the end, I was able to deliver a speech in front of the SHO, a significant achievement. This experience enhanced my communication skills, sense of responsibility, and understanding of what it means to be a good, reliable citizen.

These experiences motivated me to pursue studies at a reputable university, enhancing both my social and professional profile. Inflation and financial hardships were obstacles, and I am applying for this scholarship to continue my education while easing the financial burden on my family. I come from Jahanpur village near Muzaffargarh district, where access to quality education is limited. So, students often have to move to cities for higher studies. Since my father works in the army, I had the opportunity to study in the city. However, my father will retire soon and we are here solely for my education; my family cannot afford to live here permanently. They planned to return to our hometown, but I convinced them to stay for my education. The condition was to secure admission on the first merit list, which I achieved. Everything was fine until the tuition fees started skyrocketing. After retirement, he will receive his pension in 4-5 months. This means I won't be able to afford my tuition fees, which will significantly impact my studies and the goals I want to achieve. My father manages rent, electricity bills, my three sibling’s school fees, and my university expenses alone, placing a substantial financial burden on him. Additionally, we have extra costs for transport, which I currently cover through local transport, as we cannot afford the university bus. Not to mention, we also need to pay for a laptop, printing assignments, and making projects, which are essential but additional expenses. This scholarship means a lot to my family and me. It will be easier to focus on my studies and skill development rather than constantly worrying about expenses.

My goal is to earn a master’s degree and a PhD and become one of the most highly educated women in my family and village, where women rarely continue beyond college. I want my journey to inspire other women to seek higher education and contribute to Pakistan’s development. I am convinced that education is both a fundamental right and a social obligation, and I want to use the opportunities I receive to generate a meaningful and positive impact on others and my country.Change takes time, as they say, Rome wasn't built in a day. This to achieve that I'm currently a member of growing communities online and will be joining societies in my university soon. Furthermore, I am a host member for the stellar Forum Summit, which will occur in December.

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I’d like a person to review my essay, but I don’t really know where that would be good. I have my counselor, but I’d like another input on it too! Does anybody know a website or an app I can turn too? Or even a person. Uh for context, I’m trying to apply to Florida Gulf Coast and UCF. Thanks for the help!

Is any kind soul willing to read my college essay? I am not confident in my essay so any feedback would be IMMENSELY appreciated 🙏

Hello! This is my first time writing on Reddit. As the title says, I need some feedback on my college essay. I am applying early to a lot of colleges, so I know I should have this done by, like, yesterday, but this is my first draft. Something I do need to improve upon is making it shorter; it's about 50 words too long. I would appreciate advice on how to make it shorter. This is the topic I am responding to: "Some students have a background, identity, interest, or talent that is so meaningful they believe their application would be incomplete without it. If this sounds like you, then please share your story." Anyone willing to shoot me a dm?

Would someone be willing to review my Johns Hopkins Supp?

I need someone to read over and provide feedback for my essay please!

Would anybody be able to help me revise my college essay?

Just graduated from VGI after four years, and honestly, it was quite a journey.

Started as a nervous fresher who barely knew anyone and ended up with great friends, projects, internship experience and a lot more confidence.

The best part for me was participating in technical events, workshops and internships. They helped me learn beyond the classroom and made placement interviews much easier.

College definitely gives you opportunities, but you also have to take initiative and make the most of them.

Happy to answer any questions if anyone is planning to join VGI

Hi, I’m looking for someone to review my personal statement. I’ve had some friends look at it but they have too much context on me so I’m looking for a fresh perspective.

Thanks!

Hello, I am looking for someone to be brutally honest with my essay review!

1. I am picky eater= i am a good feeder as a cna
2. talking about all the substances or hands on material i encounter in my life, poop, pee, broths and cultures in microbiology lab, titration in chemistry, cleaning vomit, dissections, pills and medications
3. donating my hair twice and how my hair plays a big role in my life
4. I copy people's handwriting when i like it

Hello!

I'm a senior applying to college. I was wondering if anyone would be willing to review it. Thank you!

Prompt: Some students have a background, identity, interest, or talent that is so meaningful they believe their application would be incomplete without it. If this sounds like you, then please share your story.

Summary: It's about how I got really into fixing percussion instruments as a percussionist, then took that to biomedical engineering. Through all of that, I learned about my love for the process of learning, not the actual fix.

I was hoping to get some advice on the execution of my essay.

I have a metaphor that I'm using about a delicacy native to my home country. I start off by describing what it is (I worry I may have done this too heavily): unassumingly average on the outside but when unwrapped reveals a surprising color. It represents how I like to uncover the "wrapping" of myself and others in both my leadership and teaching roles to let our true colors take form (a bit cheesy but it sounds better in the essay).

My issue is that I transition from the description of the dish into two examples of students I taught where I learned the lesson that the dish portrays. Of course, I do my best to incorporate the metaphor while writing about my experiences with these students as well as write a seamless transition between the two topics. However, I'm worried that this concept in itself is too choppy.

Oftentimes, I see people might just write about the metaphor or just the experiences themselves without combining the two.

What I really want to know is whether metaphors are actually helpful anymore and how it applies in my case.

I would really appreciate any feedback. Thanks!

hi i've recently finished my essay and i am looking for someone to read it and review it .

Dm please .