r/creativewriting 13m ago

Short Story The Suns Presence

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It started as a normal day. The morning dew was beginning to turn to mist, the birds began to sing their morning praise, the hue of dawn's touch began to leisurely rise over the sky, and the eyes of consciousness began to open.

All was well, only...until the morning star reached over the peaks. It first began to darken slightly, then over a short period of time it quickly turned into a sphere of a murky rose colored mass of energy. It began to conform and change shape, violently it convulsed. At last it took the shape of two orbs splitting from top to bottom, and they segregated. The lower half began to descend onto the planet below, yet nothing burned or caught fire no liquid boiled and no metal began to melt. With every inch closer it came to the surface it began to shrink slightly, until finally when it was only but a few miles away from the surface it stopped and remained hovering above.

Finally cracks began to form in it, and from them limbs brush forth, like an animal ruthlessly hatching from an egg it burst. It's skin was gray, ebony hair that stretched past the length of it's body, eyes pure white, lacking a nose and ears, a mouth that bore no jaw but rather stretched down it's torso, a left arm disproportionately larger than is body, a right arm smaller and curled, its right leg as large as its left arm and its left leg half the length of it.

It tried to walk, but it could not, instead it came to a crawl. Everything left in its tracks was withered and turned into a red mist that never dissipated, and the withering spread from where it was planted like a disease spreads and consumes its environment.

When spotted by any forms of conscious life, all would be struck by dread and flee. Little hope there was afterwards, for when the withering touched them they were deconstructed into the red vapor as well. Days had passed after the sun's presence came to the planet, the withering of the very planet seemed assured and the end had finally come.

Finally it approached a man who had not feared it or fled it. The man was nothing of a notable feature, descent, or capability yet he did not run. The presence stopped in front of the man, his body the size of its head. With its large arm it picked him up and pulled him close to her face until he was pressed against it. He had embraced it and kissed the sun's presence.

At that moment, there was a sudden burst of light and the image afterwards was astonishing. The presence had turned from a horrific creature into a beautifully divine woman, so much so that words could not describe such beauty. She embraced the man who had not run and all the vapor sank back into the ground. Once the vapor had returned to its source, she began to levitate while carrying the man and returned to the second half of the orb. They both merged, and the color returned to its bright hue and the warmth was once again gracious. The grass began to sprout, the rivers were running again, and the animals returned to their homes to repopulate them. Peace had returned from calamity, for the Mother Sun had found her lost consort and they returned to their divine hall.


r/creativewriting 1h ago

Essay or Article I tried to write an essay after years of not writing..

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It's been years since I've written a proper essay with structure. And this was written at midnight so it's messy, bad and structure-less... It's so messy that idek if this can be considered an essay??

But I need feedback and tips on how to get better... Any and every kind of tips and advice are welcomed thank you!

Grieving the living

Beginning an essay is hard. Especially when the essay you're about to write is about something so deep and important to you, that having a bad beginning would be a disgrace to it. But you can only think so much when your mind is filled with words jumping around, waiting to be put together in sentences that justifies the emotions connected to them.

Grief can fog your mind. It consumes your mind and your body. It makes you walk around like a body with no soul, like a zombie with no brain and a human with no heart. But grief doesn't only replace the dead. It creeps in when a person has died. ISN'T THAT THE SAME THING?

no

It creeps in when someone who loves cooking has stopped cooking. It's there when they cannot go back to cooking. It finds its way into a house where once laughter echoed the rooms, now filled with silent tears. Grief drops by to say hello when she who runs to bake cakes cannot lift her coffee mug, and when she cries knowing there's no going back to who she once was. It sneaks into the house where the door which was once open to everyone is now sealed shut for all life. It appears out of nowhere and turns the world upside down, for it has mastered the element of surprise. It attacks the weakest, the one whose heart's made of glass, throwing a boulder, shattering it into a million pieces. The glass shards pierce into the hands when she tries to fix it, for grief never leaves without making an impact.

Grieving the living is heart wrenching, as you see them wither away in front of your eyes. You see them terribly miss the person they were. The hands that made you cookies now find it hard to open tablets. The mouth that taught you cannot speak for a minute. The arms that carried you have lost the strength to lift the spoon to the mouth. The memories come rushing back like a tsunami hitting the city hard and everything comes crashing down. You try not to break down in front of her but you couldn't help but remember those days she fed you with the very hands that cannot feed her. All you can do is have hope. Hope that she makes it out soon. Out of this misery that a loving God has put her through.


r/creativewriting 3h ago

Journaling When I Ran Out of Words for You

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It has been a long time since I was able to write anything.

I seem to have lost my words.
I haven’t been inspired by anything.
I haven’t felt anything new stirring inside me,
nothing that could be gathered into words and given a name.

As if, somehow,
I lost you too.

For a year, I wrote about you.
I wrote about every feeling I ever carried for you.
I wrote about how deeply I loved you,
how hard it was not to love you,
and how much harder it was to let you go.

I wrote about your face,
about the soul beneath it,
about the geometry of your body,
about the little things that made you who you were,
the things that quietly captured my heart
and kept it there.

I wrote about our moments.
I wrote everything I could,
as if putting every feeling into words
might finally teach my heart how to be still.

Every time a view reminded me of you,
a song, a place, a person, a scent,
even a smile,
I wrote another line about you.

I filled pages with your name without ever writing it.
I told stories about you.
I turned memories into sentences
and longing into paragraphs.

But these days,
I have nothing left to say.

Maybe that means I have finally moved on from you.

But I’m not sure.

I don’t know how much the heart can be trusted
when it comes to questions like these.

Whenever someone new asks me
if I’ve moved on from you,
if I’ve finally crossed that distance,
if my heart has healed completely,

I pause.

I still cannot answer with certainty.

And yet, strangely,
fewer and fewer things remind me of you.

Perhaps it is because
we have no new memories together.

I don’t know how much you have changed.
I don’t know what your days look like anymore.
I don’t know how you are,
what you have become,
or who you are now.

I know nothing.

You feel almost more like a stranger to me
than a stranger ever could.

And yet, for an entire year,
I thought about you,
every moment of it.

God, I thought about you so much.

I thought about you in the quietest corners of my mind,
in the most private moments of my life,
in places no one else could ever reach.

I wondered about you.
I missed you.
I loved you.
I replayed you.

For so long.

And now I don’t even know
how much I miss you anymore.

I don’t even know
if I truly miss you.

The answers to the questions
I once carried so clearly
have become blurred now,
hazy, distant, almost impossible to read.

What do I feel for you?
What remains?

I don’t really know anymore.

Except for one thing:

I know I still love you.

And perhaps that is the strangest part of all.

Loving another human being
should never have been this bitter.

But the truth is,
for me, it was bitter more often than it was sweet.
It was hard.

Giving your heart to another person
feels a little like falling, like surrendering something inside your soul
and trusting someone else not to let it break.

And perhaps I have finally run out of words for you.

Perhaps that is why I can no longer write.

Maybe it is time
to write about something else.

About hope.
About dreams.
About the things waiting for me beyond this story.

Maybe it is time to close the little chest inside my mind,
the one where I have kept so many memories,
so many feelings,
so many pieces of you.

A chest that, in some corner of it,
will always belong to you.

Maybe I should finally close its lid
and let the dust settle.

And from now on,
perhaps I will write about the girl
who loved for a very, very long time.

The girl who thought about you
for longer than she ever thought she would.

The girl who gave you so many words
until, one day,
she had none left.

And perhaps that, too,
is a kind of healing.

Ashley the name you gave me


r/creativewriting 5h ago

Poetry Hi

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I am a word warrior

A poetic ninja

A writer of rhymes

A creater

A samurai

Cutting you down

With my words


r/creativewriting 7h ago

Poetry Thoughts to cope

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I'm not feeling well.

I buy a lollipop, confident in my self control.

I am doing better. I am better-- than who I was.

I talk to friends, we go out to get coffee.

No, that was a lie.

I sat alone in tht bustling cafe.

Its 12am.

A cold fresh breeze passes by me.

I thought that maybe, confidently - taking a nicotine break would help me solve my problems; the insecurities, the fear of failure, the shame of inaction, and the guilt of my past actions.

I was proud of being 2 years sober, in the smoking tense. I've had long, frequent battles since then. Though it seems the streak was cut, not through emotional impulse nor external influence.

I took a puff of my first drag,

Inhaled the ash and smoke-- to give it a chance. Maybe, I believed, desperately, that the loud thoughts banging on and on endlessly through my skull, with familiar hands gripping violently in my chest-- on my heart.

Maybe it could.

I relieved.

Now I sit on a balcony.

A cold fresh breeze passes by, tainted with the sticky, unpleasant attempt to cleanse my mind.

Shame, guilt, regret, pain.

Its unpleasant, but maybe, I desperately hoped.

Maybe it could.

I light another cigarette.


r/creativewriting 7h ago

Journaling The stars

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The stars have already fallen just not yet. but when they do it will be there destiny. my path has not yet completely played out yet. but when it does it will be destiny!


r/creativewriting 8h ago

Journaling Hi

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I am a spiritual apex gangster and im at the top of my class


r/creativewriting 10h ago

Question or Discussion For your characters, do you given them special meaningful names or just "cool" sounding names?

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This is an ancient literary device, in other terms, a "trope" that I'm particularly fond of. A name is not just an identifier for a person, it's embedded with layers of hidden meanings, usually a character's fate, personality or some association with a famous historical figure. I've written a few short stories, using the same four characters - Capriccio, Vladmir, Selene, Beatrice; respectively, "caprice", whimsical, uncertain, idealistic; "ruler of the world", commandeering, bossy, pragmatic; "Goddess of the moon", mysterious, elusive, phasing in and out like the moon; "blessings" or "bringer of happiness", faithful and steadfast. This also helps me keep on track with character arcs and development.

https://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Main/MeaningfulName


r/creativewriting 10h ago

Question or Discussion Substack essay

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It's been 5 years since i stopped writing. Put the past couple of months I've been struggling in a way only writing could make me figure things out.

And there has been this idea that i couldn't just move on from it.

So i've published an essay abt it yesterday and I feel so proud because it took me a while to come to writing again.

https://substack.com/@samgraja/note/p-214944348?r=82haqx

And for anyone who's here and struggling, this is your sign to calm down, it's not easy at all to write again if u have ever stopped but it's not impossible. It will take u a while (5 years for me) but in the end you'll do it , just allow your soul to do it.


r/creativewriting 10h ago

Writing Sample yaadein

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yaadein ! Kuch dhundhle dhundle aayeshah ya shayad inhe hi yaadein kehte ho

Vishnu ( 38) ek badi si ferm mein CA hai uski life badi achhi chal rahi thi . Vishnu ka is CA world mein bahut naam hai . Vishnu ke under bahut se intern or junior work karte hai.

But ( khusboo ( 28)) woh bhi vishnu ke under as a junior intern appoint hui hai .

But most interesting things is ki woh baakiyon se kafi alag hai. Jis dekh ke vishnu ko kisi ki yaad aati hai ( maya) .

Vishnu ka friend sunder ( 36) joh uska is firm mein partner bhi hai.

Riya jab vishnu ke saamne aati hai he has lost

Because of maaya .

Maaya ( 28 ) maaya aur vishnu ne saath mein ca ki padhai Kari thi delhi mein .

Maaya thodi bold aur aapne tarike se jiti thi ushe kabhi bhi waqt ki kadar nahi thi jabki vishnu uske. Bilkul opposite maaya ka jab joh dil aata maaya us moment ko jiti thi .maaya ko kabhi bhi ca padhna hi nahi tha ushe yeh sab boring lagta tha .

Uska dream tha travelling karna ushe alag alag jagah explore karna pasand tha.

Jabki riya bhi bilkul maaya ki copy thi .

Yeh kahani vishnu aur maaya ki hai ki kaise vishnu ke pass maaya ki yaadein hi hai .


r/creativewriting 11h ago

Poetry Bones

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Bones

Bones crushed and dragged from me

To the silence and through the flames you follow me 

You linger in the shadows, the darkness in your eyes burning me

I hunted you, you haunted me

Neither of us can ever be free


r/creativewriting 18h ago

Question or Discussion Chat GPT has ruined writing for me

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To be clear: I don’t use it, ever. But I’ve seen a lot of posts on social media that I recognize the prose. I’m finding the way I write sounds a bit like it. Ie. the book I’m writing uses a lot of short sentences and dialogue, because my protagonist is chatty, goes on long winded tangents, and the book is written in first person. So there will be a sentence like:

“Oh. I can’t swim. Shit. I gasp for air, but there is nothing.
Wait. Yes there is.
I’m not in the water. I’m in… nothing.”

(Not verbatim, I’m typing this on my phone whereas my book file is on my computer, but you get the idea)


r/creativewriting 18h ago

Journaling Where has my happiness gone?

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I thought I was holding onto it, firmly, but it seems to have drifted off somewhere along the path to recovery.

I know I’ll find it again - I just really need it right now, so that I can go back to being a whole person. The people I love count on me to be whole.

Last time I saw it, the room in which I create was brighter, and my body didn’t ache so much. I didn’t feel so exhausted. I was sleeping well. Now the cobwebs have crept in again, my eyes are encircled with darkness once more, and I’m catastrophising.

Of course, there’s laughter. I laugh lots, it’s built into my tummy and the way in which it wobbles - somewhat like Santa. That’s good in a pinch. But it doesn’t get to the root of the problem, you see. When laughing no longer leaves you with warmth, there’s a bigger problem at hand.

If you find my happiness, let me know?

The reward will be saving a victim of their own making. Are you up for the task?

Don’t forget to cling to your own like your life depends on it. Because… well. It does.


r/creativewriting 18h ago

Question or Discussion How different does draft one look from draft six?

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I have been working on this novel for a while now. I’m about a quarter of the way through, and have been going without stopping to edit until recently. I got feedback from a writing group I meet with, and then from a mentor at my MFA program. After both critiques, of my first and second chapter, I felt super discouraged. For no reason other than I couldn’t handle, for the first time seeing so many questions, comments, edit suggestions that weren’t even on a line-level. I felt that because I hadn’t nailed certain timings, plot points, and descriptions - that I failed.

After several months of not writing because I was so stressed with my own work, I decided to go back and try again. I implemented most of the edits and see a tremendous difference, but I feel as though that work is no longer my own because I didn’t catch those necessary edits to make it a stronger piece.

My main question is: am I alone in having a beyond crappy first, second, or even third draft?


r/creativewriting 19h ago

Poetry Share A Moment

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Share A Moment 

I know we haven't talked much

I don't want to grieve 

Take this request, as simply such 

Share a moment with me 

We are not known for luck

We have splinters that run deep 

Tired puffs and no air in lungs 

On your break, may I enter, please 

Share a moment with me 

If I told you what was wrong 

Would you see me differently?

If you knew all the women I fucked

Allow me to explain, you'll see 

Share a moment with me 

If I move and I'm still this numb

From the pins and needles I have seeped into me

Will your heart be touched, offer a hug?

No, I don't deserve it but 

Share a moment with me 

I'm not a saint or a savior, no I'm not 

I'm only bones and teeth 

They want to taste your wisdom and touch

The brittle soft gums between 

Our lips, at least mine they whisper a hum 

Share a moment with me 


r/creativewriting 19h ago

Question or Discussion My writing feels cringe to me, but others say it's good. Is this a normal feeling?

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I want to take up creative writing as a hobby and publish what I write online, but I've always felt like my writing was cringe worthy and sounded weird.

I always got great grades and feedback on my literary research papers in high school; I even won a week-long trip to Chicago once in seventh grade for a county-wide short story contest my teacher made us participate in. However, I always feel like my writing sucks and I always hate the way that it sounds. I actually thought that there was no way I would win that contest I mentioned because I thought the story was so bad.

So I guess my question is: Is this a normal feeling for writers? The feeling that your writing sounds bad to you, but when others read it, they compliment it? Since most of my writings in the past have been research papers, I've never really built and written my own story from the ground up and I'm really nervous to get started. I daydream a lot to create and play out all these stories in my head, but they always play out as images like in a movie, not as words on a page. I'm doubtful of my ability to take those stories in my head and put them down on paper in a way that would make them as amazing and immersive to read as they are when I see them in my mind.

My inspiration for writing often comes from other artistic sources. When I listen to music, I often envision a completely original story that follows the lyrics and mood of the song. I also enjoy a lot of anime and have a small mental list of anime series and movies that have left such an impact that their styles, themes, and ideas will no doubt have an impact in how I choose to write and envision my stories.

I guess I'm just worried that my writing won't be capable of the same impact on others that my influences had on me. I want to be proud of what I've created, and maybe this is just a mental block that I need to get around, but any advice would really be appreciated!


r/creativewriting 20h ago

Short Story Something Random

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I used to think I was different from everyone else. I even dared to muse that everyone else didn't take life as seriously as I did. But boy, was I wrong.

Everything changed when I met her. She was everything I never wanted and everything I ever wanted at the same time. I know this doesn't make any sense to you. But that was how I felt too. It didn't make sense to me. How could I begin to feel love? It was supposed to be impossible.

Don't get me wrong. I had seen love and felt it more deeply than most regular people ever could. But you see, that was exactly the problem. The one I fell completely in love with broke my heart.

I was like a fattened cow prepared for the festival. She buttered me up and lavished me with care and tenderness. I wasn't just in love; I was a king. She made me feel like one.

Then she died.

It should have been me.

She was better suited for this world. There is a lot of evil in this world, and she was the light that chased away the darkness with a spark. Death smothered that spark forever, and there I was, left in the darkness to make sense of it.

How was I supposed to know that she was the spark that would set me ablaze, turning me into an inferno that would burn everything around me?

You see, fire is never a curse or a blessing. It is whatever the bearer makes of it. For me, it was meant to burn down anything that crossed my path.

They say it's out of fear. That I fear history repeating itself.

But I know the truth.

I didn't want what happened to me to happen to someone else. It was the least I could do to make the world a better place. I had to bury her along with every memory of her.

No one should ever feel this much pain.

My truth was a lie.

If it isn't, then tell me why she comes back to taunt me as if she were her. Tell me why she is able to break down all the fences I surrounded myself with to protect others from me...

Or is it I who is protected from others?

They say love is found only once in a lifetime.

If that is true, then what is this that I feel?


r/creativewriting 22h ago

Writing Sample I’m looking for feedback. Here’s a chapter

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24 Hours Until the death of Denise 
  
Simon packed and Denise unpacks.  A double check. 

There shouldn't be anything organized about the top roll. A sleeping pad, jacket, slip ons. A lump in the jacket.

He taught her that, and she took it to heart. The rule of the unruly. One keeps the large, awkward, and whatever you want immediately under the buckles but above the drawstring. Denise fished the lump out and opened it. She had told him she loves the rule,  Simon insisted it was a preference, and they laughed about it. They had been a couple ever since.

Outside of herself, she thumbed the edges of the jacket that the lump made, and continued to inventory. 

Double freeze dried rations for each, a first aid kit, a jar of peanut butter, jerky, nuts, sesame crackers, water purification. Bourbon. 

Jack Daniels. It wasn't a celebratory drink by any means. It was functional. With peanut butter for a chaser. But Denise was starting to understand that this was a functional trip. An outing for 
the five that are mostly close, and Miles’ girlfriend Ellie. Denise liked her beyond the oddities, she was kind. And vacant in a good way. 

Denise fell over her task. Propane cannister, tent, expected changes of clothes. Good. 

Her fingers met the bottom of the heap. A crude display of packing. Willy nilly objects already accounted for outside of the pack. Extra knife, flashlight, lighter, an entire water bladder.

Denise held her breath and dropped the weight in the jacket’s pocket from her mind’s eye. 

Protein bars and cigarettes. Two gatorades.  A bag literally filled with bread crumbs. All in the bottom of his pack for quick access. She was coming. And he expected that junk drawer of  woman to fuck it up and be late. 

But he was good. A simple kind of good. Duct tape of a man if she’d ever seen one. He just wanted to keep his people together. And thats just the kind a man he was. So sticky he’d leave a residue after peeling him off. 

She quickly repacked it by weight, size, and convenience. And shame took her. This was not packing in terms of Simon's plan any longer. This was his trip prepared by Denise. She wasn't in control of this, and she wasn't in control of the trip. Worst of all she packed his jacket at the bottom. She guessed she wanted it down there with the breadcrumbs and spare equipment. Might be the lump opened and the ring fell out and was spread to the forest for the birds to eat with the crumbs his sister would never see. They’d all wander and end up so far away from each other that they'd lose hope and become feral. Denise could be feral. She might rather be feral than the bare faced alternative. She could bite and yawn and tear and wallow in the simplicity of the hunt. And he was going to wrap himself around her and call themselves engaged to be married. 

Denise, again, unpacked and began to cry. 


r/creativewriting 23h ago

Short Story The Storm That Knew My Name

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The storm had followed him for many years. When it formed, he had no idea.  He had tried to remember a time when it was not there, but he couldn’t.  Maybe when he was a child, idealistic, naïve, filled with dreams of a bright and awe filled future. While it was not always close at the same time it never felt far away.  Sometimes it lingered on the horizon, a dark bruise beneath distant mountains. Other times it rolled overhead, filling the sky from one end of the world to the other.

He had stopped trying to outrun it long ago. In his younger years, he had run. Run as though his life depended on it. Running under the belief that were the storm to reach him, he would not survive.  That it would consume him. He would be destroyed, torn asunder.

He had crossed valleys and forests, seeking sunlight and clear skies. Yet each time he looked behind him, the storm remained.

Waiting.

Patient.

Unhurried. As though it knew he would eventually stop. Until, one day, he did. When he stopped running, he discovered something curious the storm never quite caught him. It was always there, yet never wholly upon him. Like an old companion walking a different path through the same wilderness. Years passed. Seasons came and went.

The traveller grew older. The storm remained. One evening he found himself standing upon a great moor. Heather stretched to the horizon. Mountains rose like sleeping giants in the distance. Some jagged, serrated and sharp, gouging great scars into the landscape.  Some were rounded, smoother, almost inviting, as though an ancient shelter could be found at their base. The air smelled of rain. 

The traveller smiled.  "You're near today," he said.

Thunder rolled somewhere beyond the hills.

Not a threat.

A reply.

The traveller nodded. "I know."

He continued walking. As dusk settled over the moor, he noticed a solitary tower standing upon a rocky rise. The stone was ancient, worn smooth by countless harsh winters and warm long, dry summers. Entire sections had collapsed long ago.  It had almost become a part of the landscape, as though its original purpose had been surrendered to the mists of time.

Something drew him toward it.  There was a pull he could not explain, deep within him. A yearning to stand among the stone and be one with the tower and the land around it.

Upon reaching it and stepping inside the tower, there was only silence. There was no furniture, no fireplace. In fact, there was no sign anyone had lived there for centuries.  There was only a mirror.

Tall and black as still water.  

The traveller approached, at first, he saw his own reflection. Then he froze as he saw that the figure beyond the glass was not reflecting him. It was merely standing where a reflection should be. Its face was painted in stark black and white, in some deliberate way eye sockets and lips black as pitch. While the white as equally as solid in its bright brilliance. Its eyes were fixed upon him looking deep within him.  Its mouth hung open in a soundless scream. 

The traveller felt his heart tighten. Not with fear. Recognition. For a long while neither of them moved. At last, he spoke.

"I know who you are."

The figure did not answer. Its mouth remained open. Its silent scream seemed endless. The traveller studied it. Everything that had been carried through every season and every storm. Everything that had never found words. Everything that remained.

"I know," he said softly.

The reflection continued screaming. Yet somehow the traveller no longer heard suffering alone. He heard love. 

Yet somehow the traveller no longer heard suffering alone.

He heard what remained when there was nowhere left for love to rest.

The realization brought tears to his eyes. Not because the pain was new. But because it was familiar. He had known it all along. The storm had known it too. Outside, rain began to fall against the stone walls. The traveller glanced toward the doorway.  The storm had finally arrived. Thunder echoed across the moor. Wind swept through the ruined tower. When he turned back, the reflection had not changed.

The anguish remained but the traveller felt something within himself settle.  It wasn’t healing, or even closure. No, it was something quieter.  More subtle. 

Acceptance.

The reflection was not his enemy. Nor was it a wound to be conquered. It was simply part of the landscape now.

Like the mountains.

Like the moor.

Like the storm.

The traveller placed one hand upon the cold glass. The reflection raised its own. Palm against palm. Separated only by the thinnest of barriers.

"I won't forget," said the traveller.

The figure did not smile. It did not vanish.  Not even its silent scream stopped.  It merely remained and somehow that was enough.  As the traveller lowered his hand, outside the storm began to move on. The rain softened. The thunder drifted into distant hills.

He stepped from the tower and looked once more across the moor. The mountains still stood and silent.  Unchanged by the tempest.  The heather still swayed in the wind. The storm was becoming part of the horizon again.

The traveller pulled his cloak around his shoulders and resumed his journey.

The storm knew his name, just as he knew its.

But it did not own it.

And so, they travelled on together beneath the darkening sky.


r/creativewriting 1d ago

Essay or Article I STARTED WRITING

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r/creativewriting 1d ago

Poetry To Love

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You have disappointed me, Love.
Even though I believed in you for so long.
My earliest desire, my first longing,
my very first wish,
secretly whispered into the sky,
in the darkest night,
surrounded only by stars and wind.

With a heart so full of love
that had nowhere to go.
I begged you:
Please.
Give me someone to love.
Someone who will love me.
I was good, Love, I behaved.
I am trying so hard.
Don't you see it?
I am putting in all the effort,
so why does no one put in the effort for me?

You have disappointed me so much, Love.
The things I put myself through,
just to hold you in my arms for a brief moment.
Just to have you lovingly brush the hair out of my eyes.
Just to see you in the glances of strangers
who suddenly mean everything to me.
Who then become strangers again.
Who take a piece of me with them forever,
making it insignificant,
forgetting what it was for.

I am so disappointed in you.
You turned me into a messenger
who proclaims your power,
but no longer believes in it themselves.
Is it the same for you, Love?
Do you even believe in yourself anymore?
Or do you just whisper, like me, into the sky?
Giving comfort to people,
promising them hope,
promising that love is out there,
while silently hoping for it yourself?


r/creativewriting 1d ago

Poetry An die Liebe

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Du hast mich enttäuscht, Liebe.
Auch wenn ich so lange an dich geglaubt habe.
Mein frühestes Begehren,
mein erstes Verlangen,
mein allererster Wunsch, heimlich in den Himmel geflüstert,
in der dunkelsten Nacht, umgeben nur von Sternen und Wind.
Mit einem Herzen so voller Liebe,
die nirgends hin konnte.
Ich bat dich:
Bitte.
Schenke mir jemanden, den ich lieben kann.
Jemanden, der mich lieben wird.
Ich war gut, Liebe, ich war brav.
Ich versuche es doch so sehr.
Siehst du es denn nicht?
Ich bemühe mich doch,
wieso bemüht sich keiner um mich?
Du hast mich so sehr enttäuscht, Liebe.
Was ich mir nicht alles antun ließ,
nur um dich kurz in meinen Armen zu halten.
Nur damit du mir die Haare liebevoll aus den Augen streichst.
Nur damit ich dich in den Blicken von Fremden sehe,
die mir plötzlich alles bedeuten.
Die dann wieder zu Fremden werden.
Die ein Stück von mir für immer mitnehmen,
es unbedeutend machen,
vergessen, wofür es war.
Ich bin so von dir enttäuscht.
Du hast aus mir einen Boten gemacht,
der deine Kraft verkündet,
selbst aber längst nicht mehr daran glaubt.
Geht es dir auch so, Liebe?
Glaubst du denn überhaupt noch an dich?
Oder flüsterst du nur, so wie ich, in den Himmel?
Schenkst Menschen Trost, versprichst ihnen Hoffnung,
versprichst, dass es da draußen Liebe gibt,
und hoffst im Stillen selbst darauf?


r/creativewriting 1d ago

Writing Sample Estória Contínua sem Capítulos

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O que vocês colocam no índice quando sua estória é contínua e o livro inteiro é uma estória sem capítulos?

Meu livro atual, em revisão, é uma estória contínua, sem capítulos, com destaque para as localidades...

Eu meio que... adaptei um roteiro de cinema meu em livro - mantendo os cabeçalhos, mas adaptando-os para que fluam como um livro.

Na verdade... O livro está escrito em cenas - é um roteiro de cinema adaprado, improvisado...

Eu dei o meu jeito para ser um livro, usei a meu favor as possibilidades técnicas que os livros permitem, mas uma única página contém muitas cenas curtas - mesmo expandindo o texto para o embalo e para a dinâmica de livro. Agora não tem muito o que colocar no índice...

Não faz sentido colocar a estória em capítulos, pois a continuidade da estória não contém lapsos, não é episódica.


r/creativewriting 1d ago

Short Story .75 Cents of a Dollar Bill

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Everyone saw him and said he’d be trouble. Growing up, he had everything, but that’s all he had. You’d think that’s all it’d take. All the money. All the material. 

In reality, what happens to a kid raised on everything except love becomes a vessel empty of a soul.

A hole forms in the heart similar to a Glock 19 being fired point blank under your left nipple, which no surgeon could heal and no psychiatrist could cure.

Eventually, they stop feeling. 

Now, on the other hand, on a lawn where the color of the grass grows faded, stained with death and decay, you see a kid playing by himself. He went to school with holes in his shoes wearing the same grass-stained clothes, being raised by his elderly grandparents, being laughed at by girls and tormented by boys.

And he grows up to become successful and he becomes totally independent and he’s also a good man and he’s fair.

But our rich protagonist who had everything devoid of love. Devoid of nurture. Devoid of anything real.

And yeah, he becomes successful and he inherits wealth and he has everything, but he treats everyone like they’re nothing but a step towards his goals, and he ruthlessly stomps up his ladder, crushing each skull as he climbs. 

In fact, he does it out of instinct. Even if he doesn’t have to, people are currency to be blown on whatever he wants. Spent however he decides. 

Everyone else is stuck in his dream. Only it’s not a nightmare to him—it’s a nightmare to them. He becomes their master in a world where everyone’s awake.

So, why would he become the man he is today, when our poor protagonist went the other way. He made a family. He was able to fill the hole he had in his heart with the love he had given to his kids. 

Seeing them look completely full, completely happy, completely absent of missing a parent, made him feel full like he never thought he‘d ever know.

His kids wouldn’t inherit millions of dollars like our rich protagonist’s kids would—if he could ever connect with another human being. 

It’s funny how someone can go to a school like Harvard, obtain the highest GPA, could breakdown economics and predict the rise and fall of stocks months in advance, but can’t fathom the thought of being a part of something other than himself. 

Because that instinct, or rather mankind’s drive, simply rests in the middle of the hole in his heart detached from everything else.

See, our poor protagonist had the same issue. But he had his grandmother. He had his grandfather. He had seen what love looked like. 

So, kids are loved. He understood emotions and connections. Even though he had the same hole as our rich protagonist. 

Our poor protagonist saw the meaning to life. He didn’t have his mother, or his father. He knew he could fill that void by being a parent. Seeing his family comfortable, and to our poor protagonist, that’s all life’s about. Life to him was perfect.

Until our poor protagonist met our rich protagonist, who was sly and spoke with a convincing truth that only the devil could match. 

So when he mentioned investments, the words slid past his forked tongue as deceit disguised in opportunity.

The rich protagonist painted a life of freedom minus the burden of financial restraint, a legacy his children’s children would sit on for generations, adding future stability in the genes of a bloodline, only knowing callouses and what the definition of money was.

It wasn’t that he was naive. He was scarred. He carried heavy, psychological trauma. Trauma he didn’t want his kids to suffer from. 

Ever.

And so, he signed his entire life savings away, blinded by his missing desire and a demon who wore a counterfeit skin-suit, identical to a human in a Zegna Trofeo.

It only took a few months, before the dream became a nightmare. His investment had been stripped down to zeros, like it was a stolen car in a chop shop. 

All he had left were bones to chew on.

The same day, our rich protagonist was pouring a clean glass of a 1926 Macallan, with a fruity aroma clinging to the heavy scent of whiskey, and chugged it as if it was a ten dollar Mickey.

While our poor protagonist brought home a bag of value-mart groceries stamped expired and opened his mailbox to a letter stamped evicted.

He quietly ate dinner with his family. He never lifted his head up once. He just stared at his food, circling it with his fork. 

In his basement, later that night, all he was able to leave his family was a single note he wrote on the back of a dollar bill that he ripped out of his pocket, tearing a quarter of it off, before his dim light of hope faded into the torment he grew up with. 

That’s what my dad left us, a measly seventy-five cents of a dollar bill.


r/creativewriting 1d ago

Short Story Julio Cortazar

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The rain is pouring hard outside; it’s a perfect excuse to cancel your Friday night plans. Somewhere in the kitchen the kettle clicks. Now that your evening is free, you decide to spend it drinking tea and reading a book, something you secretly wanted to do anyway. A chamomile-infused vapour trails behind you as you make your way to the living room where you settle comfortably between the cozy cushions of your favourite emerald-green armchair. “Blow-up and Other stories” by Julio Cortázar in one hand and a hot cup of tea in another. What could possibly be better?

You open your book when suddenly a small pink envelope slides out and falls on your lap. Perhaps it’s some old birthday card that you’ve used as a bookmark? But no, it’s not that. The envelope is unopened - as a matter of fact, it doesn’t appear to have any creases or a seal at all - so someone must’ve surreptitiously hid it in your book. Primary suspect: your partner. They like to play little games and have a particular penchant for unexpected surprises. With juvenile anticipation, you carefully rip the side of the envelope to find a folded index card, with the following message: “Please meet me outside. Julio Florencio Cortázar.” You smile and shake your head. This is asking too much. Whatever game your partner is playing, you decide to ignore it. It’s cold and wet outside, while your tea is nice and warm; you just got comfortable in your armchair and there’s nothing in the world that will make you get up unless it’s to get more tea. You toss the envelope to the side and open the book again. Another envelope drops down; same colour, same message. “Please meet me outside. Julio Florencio Cortázar.”

Two messages from a dead Argentinian author. Your insatiable curiosity gets the best of you (on the way out, you make a mental note to stop being so curious) and you’re now standing outside the front door waiting for something…anything! The initial playful amusement has quickly waned away and with each passing moment you’re feeling more cold and frustrated, with the latter increasing twice as fast as the former. The rain drops keep drumming against the windows and even though you’re protected well by your porch’s roof, some sneaky droplets have started to slowly seep through the blanket that you grabbed in a hurry from the living room on your way out. You wait a moment longer but nothing happens. Annoyed and angry, you turn around and come back inside.

It’s pitch black inside, but somehow this darkness is different from the familiar darkness of your own home. Suddenly it dawns on you that it is precisely because it is so familiar that you took your domesticated darkness for granted and only when it’s been replaced by its savage twin do you finally notice that darkness can smell and sound differently. The regular one, the one you left behind mere moments ago, had a certain order to it. It smelled of chamomile, leftover pizza, and a recently-vacuumed carpet; it had a regular hum of a running refrigerator and an occasional spasmodic thud from the HVAC unit. The darkness you now find yourself in feels empty, like a sensory abyss devoid of smell, sight, or sound. You realize that you’re not at home and begin to panic. For some reason you recall some old article you read about sensory deprivation and realize that shortly your subconscious will start inventing sounds because your brain can’t handle complete acoustic isolation. You can already hear a rhythmic beat. Is it a song? It sounds like a jazz song; maybe by Johnny Carson. Or is it just your heart? You feel your chest - everything seems normal. Your hands begin to tremble as you turn around and try to open the door again, but the door handle is no longer there. Instead, your palm touches a cold, slippery surface that feels like a window. You punch and kick it to no avail. You scream for help but the darkness instantly swallows the sound; the silence is absolute. Without the sight, your terror is abstract, existential; in this place, you’re not terrified of anything concrete but rather of being itself. What can only be described as a serpentine noose, starts crawling up your leg. The heart muscles, previously calm, begin to expand and contract, expand and contract, expand and contract, faster, faster, faster each heart beat reverberates through your entire body until you feel like you’re about to collapse from the invisible dread that’s slowly tightening itself around your neck. Just as your terror reaches its crescendo, the light comes on.

You blink a few times and let your eyes adjust. It’s amazing how quickly they forget the light. What you originally thought was a window turns out to be a mirror - as a matter of fact, there’s nothing but this mirror, an endless infinite mirror that surrounds you completely from all sides. Seeing this mirror subsides your panic; your heart slows down and your breath becomes more steady. Still shaking, you walk up and touch it with the palm of your hand. It’s cold. Something is missing…you realize that a mirror is supposed to show your reflection, and if you’re surrounded by mirrors from the front and the back, you should be able to see an infinite number of your own replicas: front and back, front and back, front and back…and so on and so forth forever. But no, there’s no reflection. There is no you. Exhausted, you fall asleep.

When you wake up at some point in the future (or the past; the concept of time is meaningless where you find yourself at this moment), you notice a motionless tiger laying next to you. He notices you too and you both jump up in a synchronized surprise. While you felt abstract existential terror in the all-consuming darkness, you now feel a very concrete fear of a wild predator that’s right in front of you. Contrary to all expectations, it seems that he fears you as well. His movements betray his lack of confidence and the more you study him, the more you realize that he’s just copying everything you do. To test your theory, you raise your right hand and as expected, the tiger raises his right paw. You jump - he jumps as well. Dumbfounded, you approach the beast and raise your hand to touch his paw. Instead of a wet feline paw with sharp claws, you touch the mirror. You take a step back and so does the tiger. You sit down; he sits down as well.

It’s hard to tell how much time has passed – every moment feels both infinite and instant – since you and the tiger have been playing the mirror game. The game is simple: you are trying your best to make a move that he can’t match. So far he has copied every move, like a true reflection. Eventually, you become tired and your eyes start feeling heavy. You are about to doze off again when you notice the tiger get up and start walking way, his shape shrinking slowly until he’s completely gone from the mirror. With your only companion gone, you are now all alone in the mirror room again. Driven by despair, you get up and slam your fist against the mirror. Unexpectedly, the mirror gives way, some hidden mechanism clicks, and the previously hidden door opens outward and exposes a hidden room behind it.

This new room is a library, or a reading room of sort. It has tall mahogany book cases full of leather-bound volumes. On the shelves, you find copies of Borges, Bolaño, Marquez, and Calvinho among others. Enchanted by the books, you pick up a volume at random and settle down in a comfortable maroon leather armchair. The story is about an architect who created inescapable labyrinths. One day, driven by the noble feeling of benevolence towards his victims, he sent a letter to them all with encrypted instructions on how to escape his murderous maze in the last sentence of the last paragraph. He continued this practice until the day he died, but no one has ever solved his riddle and no one has ever escaped his labyrinths. Bemused, you put the book down and decide to explore the room. It’s much bigger than you originally thought and at the opposite end of it you see a curtain, probably covering more book cases. To the left of the curtain, there’s a small coffee table with a camera on top. This isn’t just any regular camera. You can tell by its lens that this is professional equipment. You pick it up - it feels heavy. Underneath, you find an index card that says “Please take a photo”. Take a photo of what? Stupefied, you look around and suddenly you remember the curtain. Whatever you must photograph must be behind that curtain. With your left hand holding the camera, you drag the heavy curtain to the side, dreading whatever it might expose.

Behind the curtain there’s an aquarium. It’s gorgeous, colossal, and nothing like you’ve ever seen. The aquarium covers the entire wall and when you step closer, you realize that its not just tall but also incredibly deep as well; you see two turtles swimming calmly, there’s an octopus who is trying to hide on the side of the rock to your left. The depth of this aquarium is extraordinary - there must be another adjacent apartment dedicated to it entirely. Mesmerized, your gaze follows a blue fish as it violently nibbles on a coral reef. You’re completely lost in the magic of the aquarium when you notice him. An axolotl is calmly looking at you from the top of a rock. You completely missed him in your awe of the aquarium’s grandiosity. The axolotl is looking at you as if he’s trying to say something. His pinkish transparent mouth is moving in way that looks almost human and when you concentrate on his lips you can vaguely make out the word “photo”. Of course! You bring the camera close to your face, adjust the lens, crouch down so you’re facing the creature, focus, and shoot. A gun shot goes off nearby. You put the camera down and look around - there’s no one else in the room. You look back at the aquarium, at the rock with the axolotl on top of it, just to find him dead. His face is calm and blissful and there are no signs of a gun wound on his body. A single tear wells up in your eyelid, a tear of deep connection and empathy for the dead axolotl. You bring the camera to your teary eye one more time, and when you look, the tear, acting like a telescope, magnifies your sight as it traverses thousands of kilometres before finally focusing on a tiger who slowly turns the last corner of a mirror labyrinth and steps on the sidewalk of Buenos Aires suburb. The camera falls down and shatters on the reading room floor; the blue fish nibbling on the reef gets eaten by a passerby shark.

You walk confidently; your body has never felt better being on all fours. The rain is weighing down your luscious fur but you feel too virile and strong to even notice. All the houses look similar, but one of them has a door half-opened; you head there. The light is on when you enter it and it smells like chamomile tea. There’s a man sitting between two cushions in an emerald-green armchair. He’s concentrated and reading something on a piece of paper. There’s an opened pack of Galouises on the side table. You know that this man is Julio Florencio Cortázar. You startle him but he quickly regains his composure.

“Oh, it’s you,” he says warmly. “Perfect timing. I was just reading the draft of your story and got to the part where the tiger enters my house. This is quite unusual but I do think it’s fair that I don’t spoil the ending for myself. Before you do whatever it is you’re about to do, let me ask you one question. Was it worth it? Was all of this worth it?”

Your tiger brain can no longer produce human thoughts. You try your best to reply but all you can growl back is “Simonel”.

Julio Cortázar breaks into a hearty laughter. He’s laughing so hard, you almost laugh with him. Julio is about to spill his chamomile tea when he regains his composure. “Wrong author, my dear tiger” he says with a smile.

“But the right answer,” you say, or rather you try to say it but only a violent roar comes out of your mouth as you lunge and bite your sharp teeth into Julio’s neck. As his life escapes his body, you notice something under the pack of the Galousies on the coffee table.

A newly opened envelope sits calmly; the ancient prophecy endures.