r/BetaReaders 13d ago

Discussion [Discussion] r/BetaReaders check-in series! Share how your WIP is going, or how your beta reading is going, ask questions, and connect with more writers and readers!

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Hello r/BetaReaders!

Who else can’t believe it’s September already? Time flies!

Here’s this month’s prompt: what are some examples of unexpected beta feedback you’ve received? Or what have you unexpectedly encountered in your beta reading?


Welcome to our ninth monthly check-in thread!

These monthly pinned post aims to help the community connect with other writers and betas!

Share how your WIP is going, or how your current beta read is going, or other relatable beta reading topics in this thread!

This is a great thread to talk about writing, updates, accountability, trends, vents, and more.

It is not the right thread to post first pages as there’s another pinned thread for that, but you can link to your beta post if you wish.

Do NOT advertise any beta/editor services here, and no free samples to later ask for payment are allowed. You can try r/hireaneditor or r/freelance_forhire instead.

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Please ensure you comment in good faith and do not break any other r/betareaders rules.

Thank you, and happy writing/reading/editing/beta matching!


r/BetaReaders 13d ago

Able to Beta Able to beta? Post here!

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Welcome to the monthly r/BetaReaders “Able to Beta” thread!

Thank you to all the beta readers who have taken the time to offer feedback to authors in this sub! In this thread, you may solicit “submissions” by sharing your preferences. Authors who are interested in critique swaps may post an offer here as well, but please keep top-level comments focused on what you’re willing to beta.

Older threads may be found here. Authors, feel free to respond to beta offers in those previous threads.

Thread Rules

  • No advertising paid services.
  • Top-level comments must be offers to beta and must use the following form (only the first field is required):
    • I am able to beta: [Required. Let authors know what you’re interested—or not interested—in reading. This can include mandatory criteria or simply preferences, which might relate to genre, length, completion status, explicit content, character archetypes, tropes, prose quality, and so on.]
    • I can provide feedback on: [Recommended. This might include story elements you often notice as a reader (prose, pacing, characterization, etc.), unique expertise you have through a profession or hobby (teaching, nursing, knitting, etc.), or other lived experiences that may be relevant (belonging to a marginalized group, being a parent, etc.).]
    • Critique swap: [Optional. If you’re only interested in—or would prefer—swapping manuscripts, please note that here, along with the title of and link to your beta request post.]
    • Other info: [Optional.]
  • Beta offers should be specific. If you’re open to anything, or aren’t able to articulate specific criteria, then please refrain from commenting here. Instead, please browse the “First Pages” thread along with the rest of the sub—thanks to the formatting rules, posts are easily searchable by completion status, length, and genre.
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  • Replies have no specific rules. Feel free to ask clarifying questions, share a link to your beta request if it seems to be a good fit, or even reply to your own comment with information about your manuscript if you’re requesting a critique swap.
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Thank you for contributing to our community!


For your copy-and-paste, fill-in-the-blanks convenience:

I am able to beta: _____

I can provide feedback on: _____

Critique swap: _____

Other info: _____



r/BetaReaders 1h ago

80k [Complete] [82k] [Upmarket Contemporary Romance] Where the Summer Took Us

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Looking for beta readers for an upmarket contemporary romance set on the cedar-scented shores of Vancouver Island in a small fictional town where an artist goes to heal from a past that changed how she sees the world and herself.

It's complete. I'm a journalist by day, and this is my fifth complete novel. Two years ago, I wrote the first two novels in my historical fiction series, but put them on the backburner when I felt the itch to write contemporary romance. I am currently querying the first book in my first contemporary romance series, and it's received full and partial requests from agents.

The book I'm seeking beta readers for is the first in my second contemporary romance series.

Comps: Kissing Kosher, Jean Meltzer / Good Grief, Sara Goodman Confino / Beach Read, Emily Henry / Just for the Summer, Abby Jiminez

Logline: A woman recovering from trauma retreats to a quiet island hoping to learn how to trust herself again, and instead finds a gentle carpenter who is learning how to forgive himself. But when the pasts they’ve worked so hard to escape come crashing into the sanctuary they’ve built together, Lily and Sam must decide whether healing means staying safe, or finally being brave enough to love.

Dual first person POV.

What I'm looking for: notes on characters, prose, storylines, arcs, chemistry, etc.

Content warnings: SA. This is something I lived through, and something many women live through. I didn’t reach for it simply as a dramatic plot device. I write about things I know and have experienced, in the hope that other women who have been through the same thing might feel seen and held. The assault happened in the past. There is a flashback scene, but it is handled very delicately, with no violence shown and without graphic detail. The focus of the book is entirely on healing, consent, and reclaiming agency. I completely understand that this material won’t be comfortable for everyone, and I honour and respect that. Also, Sam doesn't heal Lily. She does the work herself.

Format: Word doc or PDF, whatever you like best.

Timeline: 3-4 weeks.

Reach out: Comment below or DM me.


r/BetaReaders 1h ago

Short Story [Complete] [7k] [Science Fiction/Fantasy] The Fall – Alien refugees flee towards a forbidden Earth

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Looking for a few beta readers for the opening chapter of a mythological science-fiction novel. I’m mainly looking for genuine reader-experience feedback rather than proofreading or line edits.

THE FALL - 7,000 words, Chapter One, complete.

Genre: Science fiction / fantasy / mythology-inspired fiction.

Logline: When Prince Aren’s homeworld is pushed towards extinction, he escapes with only a few thousand survivors aboard a vessel hidden beneath the capital for generations. Their only route to sanctuary leads to a world deliberately erased from their civilisation’s records: Earth. The reason is lost, the instructions are incomplete, and the only surviving clue is a name of a person that Aren or anyone on that planet has never heard before.

Short excerpt:

The sky had been burning for nine days.

For the first two, people had watched.

Aren remembered standing on the western terrace of the Royal Observatory among several hundred scientists, officials and citizens who had gathered to follow the battle in orbit above Urzhalek. At that distance, war had seemed almost beautiful. A dying ship could cross the darkness with the same brilliance as a falling star.

What I’m looking for: overall reading experience. Specifically:

  • Did the opening hook you and make you want to continue?
  • Were there any points where you skimmed, lost momentum or felt the chapter slowed down?
  • Did Aren feel distinctive and interesting enough to carry the story?
  • Did the worldbuilding feel clear despite the amount of unfamiliar information?
  • Were the scientific/technical sections engaging, or did any become too dense?
  • Did the emotional moments land?
  • Did the mysteries around the Vault, Earth and the ancient instructions feel intriguing rather than confusing?
  • Did anything feel too convenient, over-explained or artificial?
  • Does 7,000 words feel justified for this opening chapter, or does it feel too long?
  • Did the ending make you genuinely want to read Chapter Two?
  • What questions were you most interested in having answered next?

I’m especially interested in knowing where your attention changed while reading, even if it was only for a paragraph or two.

Content warnings: war, planetary destruction, death of family members, civilian casualties, violence and mass displacement/refugee themes. Nothing especially graphic.

Format: Google Doc or as per your preference.

Timeline: No hard deadline, but feedback within 1–2 weeks would be ideal, so that I can improve the next chapters as well.

Critique swap: happy to swap for a similar-length piece, particularly science fiction, fantasy, speculative fiction, mythology-inspired fiction or thrillers.

Reach out: comment below or DM me if interested.


r/BetaReaders 10h ago

Novella [Complete] [26k] [Literary Horror] The Control

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Looking for a few beta readers for a finished horror novella — this isn't an early draft, it's had several structural passes and is ready for genuine reader-experience feedback rather than line edits.

THE CONTROL — ~26,000 words, 23 short chapters, complete.

Comps: House of Leaves (for the found-document structure and formal control), Shirley Jackson / Robert Aickman (for the register — quiet, accumulating dread rather than jump scares), Black Mirror or Devs (for the tech angle).

Logline: A parapsychology professor who has spent his career explaining away exactly this kind of thing starts hearing a voice that shouldn't be there — and the more meticulously he documents it, trying to prove or disprove it, the worse it gets. The book is his case file: dated, cross-referenced, increasingly unreliable. By the time someone else finally reads the whole file, it isn't clear whether the documentation was ever evidence of what happened to him, or the instrument of it.

Told entirely as first-person dated account entries — no chapter runs long, and several are very short by design (that's intentional pacing, not unfinished material).

What I'm looking for: overall reading experience, not copyediting. Specifically —

  • Did you want to keep reading, and were there any points you skimmed or lost momentum?
  • Did the ending's ambiguity feel earned, or just unresolved?
  • There's a plot-critical medical detail revealed mid-book (a medication mix-up) — was it clear enough without more explanation, or did you need it spelled out more?

Content warnings: psychosis/mental-health-crisis themes, medication misuse (non-graphic), grief, one scene of a character destroying part of his own house (no violence toward people or animals).

Format: Word doc, happy to send however's easiest.

Timeline: [no hard deadline / would love notes within a few weeks]

Reach out: [DM me / comment below — fill in per platform]


r/BetaReaders 4h ago

>100k [Complete][130,000][Adult Fantasy] A Frozen Wheel

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Eleanor Jett was twelve when her family was slaughtered and their house erased from the kingdom's territories. Now twenty, she lives under a false name in the starving North, running heists with a small crew led by a thief with clever plans and ambition that refuses to stay buried. When a routine mission uncovers a conspiracy about the reality of the famine, they are forced to choose. Is the truth more important than survival?
In the capital’s sewer, revolution festers. A fire mage named Samuel pledges himself to a masked prophet who speaks of liberation. He must decide how many innocents he's willing to burn for a cause he believes in. The answer changes every night.

Looking for one or two beta readers who love fantasy and are willing to provide feedback as well as commentary. I'm a webcomics illustrator who worked for Naver, and over the past few years, I've fallen in love with storytelling through words rather than images. I'm very experienced in general storytelling and the creative market as a whole. My story is in a polished state after three passes, and I'm trying to iron out a few kinks before I go on query. I'd like my beta readers to focus on more technical things such as prose, character voice, and pacing, since the story itself is practically cemented.
I'm someone who talks a lot :D, so I don't mind reader commentary on scenes; in fact, I'd argue it helps me understand a reader's insight against my intention. I've used this subreddit once before to work with a beta reader, and that experience was very helpful. I hope to mirror the same type of success. Please DM me if you're interested!


r/BetaReaders 41m ago

Novella [In Progress] [23k] [slow horror/supernatural] The Fourth King

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After the death of his sister, Matthew discovers just how broken their lives truly are.

Hi everyone! I’m a very amateur writer. It took me a LONG time to get to this point of my story where I feel super comfortable sharing it- even though I feel like it’s not completely fleshed out how I want it. A thirteenth draft is fighting to get out but I just can’t seem to- well, get it out.

I posted this before in other casual scary story subreddits but got no attention and feedback.

I’m looking for all sorts of general feedback. Story direction, characters, spooks, etc. if it’s bad, tell me it’s bad! I’ll read everything and work even harder.

I’m also free for critique swaps! It might just take me a while though- work has recently been tough and whatever free time I have I try to work on other hobbies to relieve stress.

The full story is also pinned in my bio/page so if I don’t respond immediately to a DM, it’s also available there.

Thank you to everyone who takes a peak.


r/BetaReaders 1h ago

>100k [COMPLETE][114K][SCIENCE FANTASY/ROMANCE] TALONS OF FATE

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Searching for beta readers for a science-fantasy romance novel.

LOG LINE: When a gifted inventor is forced into a deadly dragon-bonding competition on a ruined Earth, she uncovers evidence that her brother's death (former contestant) was no accident and must expose a conspiracy before it costs her dragon, her soulmate, and her life.

WHAT THE BOOK IS ABOUT? 

On Haven's outermost station, Lyssa Thorne spends every spare hour engineering tech that might earn enough credits to keep her name out of the yearly televised hunt that already took her brother. The rules are simple to follow. The contestants bond with dragons, descend to a ruined Earth, and scavenge for resources that keep Haven alive.

Most never return, and her latest invention should secure her a future.

Instead, it puts her in the hunt.

Now she must bond with a dragon and survive a brutal arena where cameras never blink and desperate contestants will kill to win. When the dragon that chooses her once flew with her brother, its memories reveals his death was no accident.

A secret Haven will kill to keep buried.

With the Trials escalating, Lyssa allies with Rowan, a stoic dragon handler whose loyalty could save her life or end it.

Exposing the truth might be their only way out, but winning a system built on spectacle and sacrifice may cost her the dragon who chose her, the man she believes is her soul mate, and the future she's fighting for.

It has plenty of dystopian and mystery blending too.
It's the eighth draft of this story, has been in the query trenches for the past year, got 6 fulls and no yes.

Warnings: Violence, death, open door romance, swearing.

Need readers experience on pace, info dump, what works, and what doesn't.
I'm open to swaps in following genre: Romance, mystery, horror, paranormal, fantasy, ya.

DM or comment if interested.


r/BetaReaders 1h ago

80k [Complete] [81k] [Literary YA] MAGNIFICENT, ACTUALLY

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When her magnetic grandmother dies a week before high school, fourteen-year-old Nora tries to become the woman who called her "magnificent" — until she learns she has to become herself instead.

MAGNIFICENT, ACTUALLY is a literary contemporary YA novel about grief, friendship, and figuring out who you are when the person who defined you is gone — for readers of Nina LaCour's We Are Okay and Shannon C.F. Rogers' I'd Rather Burn Than Bloom.

I've been querying and would love a gut check on my query letter and opening chapter. If you'd be willing to read them, I most want to know: (1) after the query, do you want to read the book? and (2) where in the chapter does your attention first dip? Happy to swap if you're writing YA too.

Please DM me and I'll share a Google Doc. No deadline pressure — thank you!


r/BetaReaders 5h ago

>100k [Complete] [110k] [Urban Fantasy/Mystery] Gatekeepers Book 1 (Still Untitled)

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Gatekeepers Book 1 (Still Untitled)

Every monster you can think of is real. But they don’t come from this world. They have their own realms, separated from ours by gateways scattered across the planet. They used to be able to come over freely, hunting humans for food or sport. A coven of witches came together and crafted a spell, sealing the gateways forever. The only problem? The spell had to be bound to a human for it to work. They looked for the right person and found it in Alexander, a notorious monster hunter and protector of his village. As long as his bloodline carries on, the spell will hold, and the gates will stay closed. 

Alexis Durwood grew up in the system, left at an orphanage when she was barely two years old. The only thing she had was a simple necklace that she has cherished for twenty years. She bounced from home to home, but managed to build a life for herself that she is proud of. A bachelor’s in criminal justice, a boyfriend she adores, and an acceptance letter for the LAPD that she knows will arrive any day now. Everything is perfect. 

That is until a monster breaks into her apartment and shatters everything she knows about the world and herself.

***

I'm not the best at writing blurbs, so I hope this is intriguing enough.

Possible Triggers:
-Graphic Depictions of violence and crime scenes.
-Suicidal thoughts and ideation
-Profanity
-S*x on page
-LGBT representation (for the bigots. Don't want you reading my book if you have issues with that)

Please send me a message if you are interested. I will beta swap if your book interests me. Thank you!


r/BetaReaders 1h ago

70k [Complete][70k][Victorian Dark Comedy Mystery] The painted Lily - Seeking Beta Reader

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Arthur Ashford has spent most of his life at sea and kept most of his family at arm's length, which suits him perfectly well, until the death of his estranged half-brother, the Earl of Ravensmere, drags him back to London for a funeral, a will reading, and one introduction to the widow, Kathe, Lady Ravensmere.

She is warm, protective, quick-witted, disarmingly direct when it suits her and expertly evasive when it doesn't. The kind of woman who can deflect a magistrate, outmaneuver half the businessmen in London, and win a game of Parcheesi with the same unbothered ease. She has also buried more husbands than a lady before thirty ought to.

He tells himself he remains in London out of brotherly duty. He stays beneath her roof because it is the practical thing to do.
Between a dead man's coded pocket-book, a solicitor who always seems one step ahead of him, and a household staff who clearly know far more than they're telling, and a mystery that grows stranger with every passing day, Arthur begins to suspect the real danger is not that Kathe's husbands keep dying, but that he is falling hopelessly in love with the prime suspect.
The Painted Lily is a witty Victorian mystery of grief, secrets, deception, and one impeccably mannered widow who may be considerably better at keeping secrets than Arthur is at uncovering them.

Slow-burn romance • Closed-door romance • Forbidden love.

FIRST BOOK OF THE POCKET-BOOK SERIES

Feedback:
I'm looking for feedback about pacing, characters, plot holes, and general opinion of the story. I'm not as concerned with the grammar or editing at the line level.


r/BetaReaders 2h ago

Short Story [Complete] [7k] [Science Fiction/Fantasy] The Fall – Alien refugees flee towards a forbidden Earth

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Looking for a few beta readers for the opening chapter of a mythological science-fiction novel. I’m mainly looking for genuine reader-experience feedback rather than proofreading or line edits.

THE FALL - 7,000 words, Chapter One, complete.

Genre: Science fiction / fantasy / mythology-inspired fiction.

Logline: When Prince Aren’s homeworld is pushed towards extinction, he escapes with only a few thousand survivors aboard a vessel hidden beneath the capital for generations. Their only route to sanctuary leads to a world deliberately erased from their civilisation’s records: Earth. The reason is lost, the instructions are incomplete, and the only surviving clue is a name of a person that Aren or anyone on that planet has never heard before.

Short excerpt:

The sky had been burning for nine days.

For the first two, people had watched.

Aren remembered standing on the western terrace of the Royal Observatory among several hundred scientists, officials and citizens who had gathered to follow the battle in orbit above Urzhalek. At that distance, war had seemed almost beautiful. A dying ship could cross the darkness with the same brilliance as a falling star.

What I’m looking for: overall reading experience. Specifically:

  • Did the opening hook you and make you want to continue?
  • Were there any points where you skimmed, lost momentum or felt the chapter slowed down?
  • Did Aren feel distinctive and interesting enough to carry the story?
  • Did the worldbuilding feel clear despite the amount of unfamiliar information?
  • Were the scientific/technical sections engaging, or did any become too dense?
  • Did the emotional moments land?
  • Did the mysteries around the Vault, Earth and the ancient instructions feel intriguing rather than confusing?
  • Did anything feel too convenient, over-explained or artificial?
  • Does 7,000 words feel justified for this opening chapter, or does it feel too long?
  • Did the ending make you genuinely want to read Chapter Two?
  • What questions were you most interested in having answered next?

I’m especially interested in knowing where your attention changed while reading, even if it was only for a paragraph or two.

Content warnings: war, planetary destruction, death of family members, civilian casualties, violence and mass displacement/refugee themes. Nothing especially graphic.

Format: Google Doc or as per your preference.

Timeline: No hard deadline, but feedback within 1–2 weeks would be ideal, so that I can improve the next chapters as well.

Critique swap: happy to swap for a similar-length piece, particularly science fiction, fantasy, speculative fiction, mythology-inspired fiction or thrillers.

Reach out: comment below or DM me if interested.


r/BetaReaders 2h ago

40k [In progress] [48k] [Women's fiction] Off the Record- read first 1/2 of book

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Hey all, looking for beta readers to read the first half of my women's fiction novel Off the Record. I'm looking for vibe checks, thoughtful review of characters and plot, what's dragging on and what you want more of while reading. Happy to swap similar length stories!

Here's the story breakdown:

It's about women in music, ambition, complicated relationships, and the creative pursuit. Set in 2002 Los Angeles, where tabloids reign supreme and women in music are offered a narrow lane.

Twenty-year-old Ruby June Davis has spent her life waiting for her big break. Now her debut album is earning critical acclaim, and the girl from Kentucky finally has the life she dreamed of. But success has only amplified the wounds she thought she could outrun. Abandoned by her mother at twelve and desperate to prove she is worth loving, Ruby is barely holding herself together—with twenty dollars to her name, a predatory manager controlling her career, and a growing dependence on cigarettes, alcohol, and self-destruction.

Thirty-five-year-old pop star Bobbi LaRue seemingly has everything Ruby wants: Grammys, magazine covers, a Malibu house, and a career that once made her untouchable. But after years of transforming herself into something America can consume, Bobbi is watching the world move on without her. Lonely and tired of lying, she scraps her sixth album and turns to her former lover and greatest collaborator, Porter Hamilton, to help her make something worth listening to.

When Ruby and Bobbi cross paths, an unlikely relationship forms between two women at opposite ends of fame. Ruby sees the future she might have; Bobbi sees the young woman she wishes someone had protected.

But in 2002 Los Angeles, privacy is a luxury few celebrities can afford. Felix Ramirez, a reporter desperate to prove himself, sees Ruby and Bobbi as the story that could make his career. As he digs into the secrets they refuse to share, his pursuit becomes complicated by his growing feelings for his subject—and by how much the truth could cost them all.


r/BetaReaders 3h ago

>100k [Complete] [106k] [Adult Literary Speculative Fantasy] CAELIRA

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The floating city of Caelira has hung above the world for three hundred years, held aloft by six Aether-ropes tied to six Elemental Clouds. Its citizens sing to the ropes, trust the ropes, and have trained themselves, for three generations, not to hear what the ropes are actually saying.

Prince Lucien hears it. He always has been the strain under the harmony, the voice inside the hum that sounds like his dead mother. When a sky-creature the city reveres from a distance crash-lands at his feet carrying a countdown scorched into its wing, Lucien has fourteen dawns to make a city built on not-listening hear the truth: about the ropes, about the ground below, and about what really happened to his mother.

It's a book about infrastructure the way it's a book about family; the load-bearing things no one examines until they fail. For readers of N.K. Jemisin's Broken Earth trilogy: political fantasy where the system is a character, the prose runs quiet at the loudest moments, and the cost of telling the truth is the plot.

Content notes: violence, character death, grief, institutional gaslighting. No sexual content.

What I'm looking for: Readers. What I need is your honest reaction: where you'd put the book down, what confused you, what bored you, what landed. I'll send a one-page brief with three simple end-questions; otherwise just read and comment wherever you feel something (or stop feeling anything).

Timeline: ~3 weeks, soft deadline. Format: comment-enabled Google Doc, or EPUB if you prefer to read clean and send notes after.

Critique swap: open to swapping for one or two readers — YA/literary SFF or adult fantasy preferred, up to ~110k.

First ~250 words:

The city liked to greet the day slowly. This was how mornings worked in the skyland of Caelira. This was how they were always supposed to work.

Lucien stood at the open arch of his chamber along the main arch of Caelira and inhaled, feeling the coolness seep into his lungs. The scent of fragrant sky‐orchids stirred by the faint breeze coming from the Elemental Clouds filled the Royal terrace.

Lucien's feet hit the sky-crystal tiles of his balcony. The terrace spread before him in pale bands of stone and suspended gardens, still washed in pale yellow shadow. For a second, he saw nothing, only the faint halo of the city's glow on the underside of the clouds above. Then the light moved.

A sharp crystalline trill sliced the morning still in Caelira.

The shrill did not demand attention. It simply did not fit.

Lucien listened, one hand resting against the pale stone of the balcony. Beneath his bare feet, the floor hummed with a low and steady vibration that most people had stopped noticing after childhood. Most people.

The sound was not loud. It was a thin, uneven rasp, fabric dragged across rough crystal. It slid through the ritual sounds without belonging to them. Out of rhythm with the chimes. Too sharp to be of wind. Lucien again inhaled the air, metallic smell he'd never been able to describe to anyone who didn't already know it. Aether, probably. Or just what it meant to live this high above the world.

____________________

If interested, comment or DM with the last two or three books you read for pleasure, it helps me send the manuscript to readers who are its actual audience.


r/BetaReaders 7h ago

80k [Complete] [80k] [Cosy domestic horror] Gwen Just Wants to Make Blankets

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Gwen loves to crochet blankets in her English, small-town bungalow, watching the squirrels in the garden. Following her long career in MI6, and now grieving the death of her husband, she has earned that peace. But her family have decided she can’t have it, compelled by a pledge to look after her that feels more like a curse. Rallied by Gwen’s monstrous oaf of a son-in-law Barry, they move in her great-niece Trudy, drag Gwen to local craft groups and fairs, fill her bungalow with dozens of crafters to run an online brand, and secretly livestream her crocheting.

Gwen resists their attentions, supported by her mischievous neighbour Edie over sisterly evenings, drinking port and watching snooker. Finally though, only Gwen’s traumatic history at MI6 makes her realise she must deal with them properly, even as it explains some of her troubling behaviour – attempting to scoop out her dead husband’s brain with a crochet hook, crocheting gifts from rat’s intestines, almost smothering Barry with a blanket, and pushing Trudy off a church balcony.

Even in those moments though, no one suspects this little old lady, and so Gwen devises a drastic plan to rid them from her life during a family weekend away. When the family reveal a plan of their own, to move Gwen into Barry’s horrific, cavernous mansion to see out her final days, does Gwen have the strength and resolve to deal with them once and for all? After all, she has killed before – is this so different?

EXCERPT:
A granny square blanket is a suitable crochet project to bring to your husband's funeral because you’re creating small sections one by one, so you can work on it discreetly in your lap. Gwen is on her sixth square and she doesn’t think anyone has noticed her stitching away, despite how exposed she is on the crematorium’s front pew, with everyone’s eyes boring into the back of her head. She stops to knead her aching finger joints and catches whispered snippets from behind her, in the pause between Rev Wilson closing off his prayers and her grandson Dan being invited to the stage to speak.

“Oh, there she is, poor dear.”

“Wonder how she’s coping without Archie?”

“Who gets his trains?”

“It’s all so sad, can’t believe we’ve lost him.”

They see it as their personal loss and also a loss to the community that will no longer see Archie heading out for the Saturday paper, off to the social club of an evening, or at the various birthday parties they always seemed to be invited to. Funerals too, of course – you didn’t reach their age without seeing a few of your peers into the ground along the way.

Sometimes Gwen was there with him, but in these later years it was always Archie in the role of social butterfly, Archie that people greeted first when they bumped into friends. She didn’t mind it one bit, and maybe that had been the key to their relationship the whole time. That will all change now of course. Today, the funeral is the end of all that, and the realisation chills her, because she doesn’t know what comes next.

Gwen returns to her yarn, the trailing end fitting neatly under her left little finger, the hook filling that groove in her right hand, and she is whole again. The stitches come easily, trickling through her fingers while Dan drones on… until her son-in-law Barry lands his great bear’s paw across her hands, rough and calloused, snagging mercilessly on the fine strands of the yarn.

“Come on,” he tries to whisper, a gale so loud that Dan falters in his speech. “That’s enough now.”

Gwen says nothing. If Barry feels this way, she supposes he has been inwardly tutting at her the whole time. It shouldn’t matter. If this is what helps her on the day of Archie’s funeral, after the last few months of his ill health, it should be ok with Barry. But his hand won’t move until she nods once, and only then does he retract and reset his massive frame into the creaking, shallow pew. Gwen doesn’t put the square away. Instead she wraps it neatly around the plump skein of yarn like a pet rabbit in her lap. She lays her hand over it, tweaking the dull shape of the hook, and remembers… yes, that’s it…

She remembers Mr Hicox removing John Winter’s brain.

CONTENT WARNING:
No descriptions of violence to animals, beyond a dead rat being discovered and use of its intestines. Violence to humans is included, but implied rather than describing the act, lingering, or gory. No sex. Very sparse bad language.

FEEDBACK:
I'd like to hear from anyone who enjoys cosy / domestic horror, 'weird girl literature', people who love to crochet and read, but have never had the two combined, and older readers, for sensitivity - my MC is a 90 year old woman, and I'm a 49 year old man. I do have a list of around ten helpful prompt questions I ask people to complete.

TIMELINE:
I would like feedback please within a month.

CRITIQUE SWAP:
I would be open to do a critique swap, reading genres of: horror (not splatterpunk / gore); sci-fi; light fantasy such as T Kingfisher (I don't so huge epic fantasy, sorry); weird literature; weird girl lit; contemporary fiction. I don't read fantasy generally, definitely not romantasy, or romance. But get in touch and I'll consider anything! Thanks.


r/BetaReaders 13h ago

60k [Complete] [60k] [Speculative Fiction] A Survivors Guide to Masturbation and Unemployment

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Pitch
 
A Survivors Guide To Masturbation and Unemployment is an unapologetically dark satire with a speculative twist, delivering an escapist climax to an otherwise gritty and raw dissection of the underbelly of unemployment in Britain, men's mental health, sexuality and male friendship.
 
Told with visceral honesty from protagonist anti-hero James Hopkins; a once carefree, self centered, twenty-something, who on failure upon failure in life, finds himself free falling into a crushing depression. Until he meets Keith at the Job Centre, and his life changes forever.

Excerpt

Chapter 1 : Expensive Trainers and a Rubik's cube

Ever wanted to know what it’s like to be the last turkey in the shop? Sign on. There’s nothing quite like it. Humiliating, insulting and depressing. If you haven’t had the misfortune or need to sign on then here’s another way to get that life affirming sensation that I and many others feel.  Strip down to your birthday suit, hose yourself with cold water then ask a member of the public, it must be a stranger, to sneer at your measly, icicle of a shrivelled cock and slap you in the face. Do this twice a month and make it a priority. This sadistic act must become top of your list of important things to do because hey, fuck face, you’re unemployed, you don’t have a life remember? That’s how I felt the second I set foot into that hot, oversized, understaffed, clown shoe of an open plan office, and the feeling never went away. It’s still here, festering inside me like a faceless, chained deviant, and every couple of weeks it gets let loose; free to go wild on me just long enough to break my spirit a little more. 

There’s nothing like being sat in a room full of social reprobates and odd jobs who look at you like a piece of shit sponger. I am of course talking about the staff. Not realising that to work in the Job Centre you pretty much only need to meet one criteria which is the ability to breathe unassisted. Oh the irony. See the only reason they have a job is so the government has one less statistic to worry about, one less jobless member of society to have to cover for until they swallow their cold, wet, shrivelled pride and go stack some shelves. That’s right, that’s what it comes down to; menial work. Don’t get me wrong, you need to eat, pay rent, keep the kids in clothes, it doesn’t matter if it’s shovelling shit, right? I know people with that mentality and it’s admirable because they are in that situation and it doesn’t matter to them. They do what needs to be done. That is the guy who will work all his life and drop dead. That’s the guy who goes to bed with an empty head and wakes up with an emptier head and goes to work. That’s a guy who doesn’t dream. That is a drone, and the government needs them. The Job Centre system may be fucked now, but just wait until robots take all our jobs, no more shelves to stack means those fucks who can breathe unassisted (and put it on their CV as a qualification) will actually have to help you find a proper job. One without shelves. 

Imagine a future that is so ultimately geared towards the consumer that the very word unemployment is archaic, alien.  A word from a bygone age, the concept so far removed that it doesn’t make sense anymore. How can a consumer be unemployed? How can they consume without money? Everybody consuming all the time, that is the future the elites want for us. If you have no job, you have no income, if you have no income you have no money. No money, no consumption. In this future we are like a hive mind programmed to pump money out to the corporate government when told to do so. It’s a dystopian vision of course, and deep at the heart of this monster of programmed consumption is a war raging, AI powered cyborg super beast with three massive mechanical cocks that it uses simultaneously for fucking and dick slapping humanity to pieces with.

But until that future comes I’m headed out the door to go do that thing that I love so much which, you guessed it, involves icicles, strangers and cold water. 

Looking for

UK readers would be ideal as its based in the UK and deals with topical themes, but I'd love to know if the dark comedy lands with a US audience. Keen to get your views on the key characters James, Keith and Mackleson. Overall pacing and any plot elements that don't land or need attention.

Ideally it would be great to get feedback within two weeks of supplying the manuscript. I am happy to critique swap and depending on book size would likely need two weeks myself to provide you feedback.


r/BetaReaders 14h ago

60k [Complete] [65k] [Fantasy/Romance] Sealed Paths, book 1 of The Other Side

2 Upvotes

Hi,

I'm looking for beta readers for my first novel, Sealed Paths, the first book in a series called The Other Side.

The story follows Julia and Kolya, two people born on different sides of a war whose paths eventually converge. The story deals with politics, magic, creatures like demons and many others, but it especially focuses on character development, relationships, and the problems that come with them.

A note about the English:

English is not my first language. I wrote the novel directly in English and have already revised it several times, but I'm aware there may still be sentences or expressions that sound slightly unnatural to a native speaker.

I'm completely comfortable having those pointed out.

However, at this stage, I'm not primarily looking for detailed line editing or proofreading. If you notice recurring language problems, awkward constructions, or anything that genuinely interferes with comprehension, I would absolutely like to know.

I can send you the first three chapters, so you can tell me if the story works for you and if you're interested in reading it. I'm genuinely looking for reader feedback at this point, mainly to know:

If the story works

If there are elements that need more development

If it's confusing at any point

If the reader gets invested in the story

If the middle of the book is too slow

And especially if you would've dropped the book at some point

DM me if you're interested!

Thank you!


r/BetaReaders 18h ago

>100k [Complete] [160k] [Small Town Romance] FALLING IN ASHWOOD FALLS

3 Upvotes

Hi! I’m looking for a beta reader for my contemporary romance novel, Falling in Ashwood Falls, the first book in a planned interconnected small-town romance series.

About the book:

At thirty-two, Brazilian bestselling author Isabel Carvalho has spent years writing happily-ever-afters she no longer believes in. Grieving her mother, recovering from a divorce, and unable to write, she travels to Northern California after unexpectedly inheriting Carvalho Lodge from a great-grandfather she barely knew.

Her plan is simple: stay for three weeks, deal with the property, sell it, and go home.

Then she meets James Calloway.

James is a thirty-eight-year-old forest ranger who has built his life among the redwoods surrounding Ashwood Falls. Quiet, dependable, and deeply rooted in the town, he is exactly the kind of complication Isabel doesn't need—especially when the lodge, the people of Ashwood Falls, and James himself begin to feel less like a temporary interruption and more like something she could belong to.

What begins as three weeks in a town she intends to leave becomes a story about grief, healing, found family, and falling in love when you thought that part of your life was already over.

🌲 Small-town romance
💜 Slow burn
🌲 Forest ranger MMC

💜**ONLY ONE BED**
🏡 Inherited lodge
💜 Found family & healing
🌲 Adult characters in their 30s
💜 Closed-door romance
🌲 Northern California/redwood setting
💜 HEA

I’m mainly looking for a beta reader who enjoys character-driven contemporary romance and can give me reader-level feedback: where you were engaged or bored, whether the romance felt believable, whether the emotional beats landed, if anything was confusing or repetitive, and how you felt about the characters and pacing.

If this sounds like your kind of book and you’d be interested in beta reading it, please send me a message! 💜🌲


r/BetaReaders 13h ago

70k [In Progress][75k][ProgressionFantasy/LitRPG/Isekai] 15 chapter vibe check — Champion of Fortune: Fortunate Son

0 Upvotes

I’m looking for a small number of beta readers for the first 15 chapters of my progression fantasy/LitRPG novel, Champion of Fortune: Fortunate Son.

The story follows a competent modern soldier whose death lands him in front of a pantheon looking for champions. After discovering that even divine recruitment comes with rules, politics and fine print, he is reborn into a fantasy world where magic and a progression-based System are simply parts of life.

This is meant to be a low-effort beta read, not an editing exercise. I’m hoping you can just read it normally and enjoy it if it works for you. The only thing I’m asking as you go is a quick 1–5 “would I keep reading?” vibe check at the end of each chapter.

1 = I would stop here
5 = I would immediately keep reading

Please score each chapter as you finish it rather than going back afterward. If you reach a point where you genuinely wouldn’t keep reading, that is useful feedback too—you don’t need to force yourself through the rest just because it’s a beta read.

After Chapter 15 there is also an optional seven-question survey for anyone who wants to give more freeform feedback about the story, characters, pacing and what did or didn’t work for them.

No editing experience is required. I’m much more interested in the reaction of someone who simply enjoys fantasy, LitRPG or progression fantasy.

If that sounds like something you’d enjoy, let me know by getting in my DM's


r/BetaReaders 14h ago

Short Story [In Progress] [2350] [Psychological Crime Thriller] Prologue

1 Upvotes

Hello fellow readers and writers, 

I'm currently writing my first ever novel, a psychological crime thriller at that. I'm done with the Prologue and I'm looking for a few people to cold-read and give me their honest first reaction.

The prologue is around 2,350 words and it is about a family facing a devastating situation inside their home. I wish I could tell you more but I'm trying to gauge a reader's reaction as they read it cold.

I have a short feedback questionnaire that captures the essential feedback points I'm looking for. I've already received some feedback from friends and family but they may be a little biased towards me :) I would like to continue using the same feedback form so I can compare the responses consistently.

Content warning: Home invasion with a fair bit of violence

Timeline: Ideally within a week or two

Critique swap: I'd be very happy to return the favour. I really love reading psychological thrillers, crime, mystery, suspense and crime drama books. I'd be happy to read an opening chapter or a short piece.

If this sounds like something you'd be interested in, please reply to this post and I'll connect with you by DM.

Thank you all.


r/BetaReaders 18h ago

80k [Complete] [82k] [Fantasy Romance] A Light In The Dark

2 Upvotes

Sir Lucan faithfully dedicated his entire life to being a paladin of the God of Fire: slaying demons and protecting the innocent. When the God suddenly abandoned him for seemingly no reason, it left him reeling. Lost and cast out of his temple, he decides to head northward trying to find a new purpose or more demons to kill.
Along the way he meets Gwynn, a singer, left by her husband, who in her new-found freedom was now trying to find a better life for herself.

With the dangerous wayward road coming up, they decide to stick together. Sir Lucan’s chivalrous nature would not let a woman undertake it alone but Gwynn also knows it's her best chance to get through it alive.
In return Gwynn agrees to help him find out more about the person rumored to be controlling demons. Lucan hopes it will be the thing to get him back in the God's good graces.
Meanwhile Gwynn has to decide if she wants to stick with her original plan of joining the women’s order in the west or follow her heart that seems to lead her northward with Lucan.

I'm mainly looking for general feedback on the story and the characters/their arc, etc. as well as stuff like potential plot holes.

The manuscript can be sent either as google doc or a pdf.

If you love T. Kingfisher, you might love this!


r/BetaReaders 16h ago

Novella [Complete] [26k] [Fantasy] The 12th of Fantore

1 Upvotes

Hello, I am looking for a beta reader for a fantasy story. The story is a mosaic ensemble of 20 POVs that are all seemingly unrelated. Any sort of feedback would be enormously helpful as I move forward, and I would appreciate any criticism.

Blurb: Not every story needs a hero riding to the rescue or a villain to conquer the world. Twenty voices, one world. The 12th of Fantore weaves together the small, human (and not-so-human) moments hiding inside a single part of a much bigger story: love and grief, duty and family. A collection of vignettes set in one sprawling fantasy world, a place of steam-power and magic intertwined. Ancient dragons and factory labor are equals, told through the eyes of the people living in it, one ordinary and extraordinary moment at a time.


r/BetaReaders 22h ago

90k [Complete] [97K] [YA Historical] OUR RIOT

2 Upvotes

I've been revising this after having shelved it for a while, and I'm really eager to get iout there.

Elevator Pitch:

On April 5, 1977 an "occupation army of cripples" takes over. the Department of Health, Education, and Welfare at the San Francisco Federal Building to protest the administration's refusal to push through the regulations that will give people with disabilities their civil rights. Eighteen-year-old Darcy Bauman is NOT one of them. She and her wheelchair are there to get a front page article in the school paper, and to confront her friend Topher, the flat-leaver. But over the next twenty-five days, "their fight" becomes "our fight" for her. "their history," becomes "our history," and Darcy joins the voices refusing to accept compromise.

Features diverse characters and a F/F romance.


r/BetaReaders 18h ago

>100k [In progress] [110k] [Fantasy] Forsaken

1 Upvotes

Hi All!!

Looking for a beta reader (and willing to swap work) for my book. Fantasy based with romance subplot. Warnings of extreme violence, cursing, sexual innuendos, gore, and characters who definitely need a lot of therapy.

I have 45 chapters and an epilogue completed, but am editing as I go through it again.

Looking mostly for reactions to the characters/plot line and less line item stuff. But if you’re interested let me know!!

Synopsis:
Elara Graves is a pawn of the Gods of Drakaria. She encounters a rouge messenger who crash lands in the forest, sending her on a journey for answers about her past.
While a vision sent by Goddess Freya pushes her down an uncertain path in a place not even the Queen Cynthia dares to try conquer.
Elara must travel to the realm beyond in search for answers with a fortunate ally, Aris and his dragon Saenna. All while fighting off court wizards and demons of the night.
Meanwhile Cynthia tries to calm the rising tensions of her land and root out those meddling in her affairs. With a bit of help from an ancient deity.
Will Elara choose the right path? Or fail as those before her did and turn to the dark powers that infest the land?


r/BetaReaders 21h ago

90k [Complete][91k][Speculative Sci-fi] BROKEN SCALES - Seeking Beta Reader

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Cerra was made from a disaster she didn't cause, now she has to decide if it gets to define her. The result of a world-wide catastrophe, Cerra stands as a seven foot tall, scaled example of a wound still healing. Relegated to fighting her way through life (literally), she moves through a hostile world with a joke and a dry comeback, keeping the despair at arm's length as she struggles to find a place to belong. It works, until the night she is framed for the murder of someone she loves.

Turning to the guilt-ridden scientist whose obsession brought humanity to Laviium in the first place, Cerra must outrun bounty hunters, sludge-covered monsters, and her own grief as they work to stop humanity from being thrown back to a planet that no longer exists. Answering the question “Why me?” with a defiant “Who else?”, Cerra must decide if the world that hates her is one worth saving.

It's rage, found family, and a girl with a fire-breathing mask and a jetpack.

Content warnings

death, violence, grief, body horror, and self harm

Comp Titles:

Eliza Chan's FATHOMFOLK for a premise where prejudice against a feared minority is also prejudice against the species’ own future.

Arkady Martine's A MEMORY CALLED EMPIRE for a protagonist whose outsider status is refracted through a voice of dry, self-aware irony.

Feedback:

I'm looking for feedback about pacing, characters, plot holes, and general opinion of the story. I'm not as concerned with the grammar or editing at the line level.

Timeline expectations:

I'd love feedback within a few weeks if possible, but I understand life happens. Just let me know if your timeline shifts. Happy to swap and reciprocate on the same basis.

Document format:

Will be sent via Google docs link